HiroKoya

Goddamn it feels like reading a research paper. You have to disect every sentence bit by bit to understand what the author meant. As for the dialogue, you can’t even tell which person is speaking.

I guess its okay, but once again the system is useless and only says big words without actually helping the mc. “Words speak louder than Actions” ah system. Everything it did so far, mc could’ve done anyway without the system. It doesn’t actively help the mc but acts entitled and prideful, as if its already given everything to mc. It’s more of a hindrance. Idk why so many authors put a system in the story, call it “almighty”, but then the actions are like a p*ssy system.

I’ll say one thing tho. Mc is supposed to have golden hair and red eyes right? Then he should attract similar if not more attraction when compared to his beautiful wives. But most people only react to the ‘woman’ which takes away the immersion. I hope you fix that in future chapters.

So the first few chapters are just smut and the real plot starts at Ch40. System unlocks around Ch78. It’s kinda funny reading author’s skills get better with each chapter.

Damn the writing quality gave me a headache.