Sinful_Forgiver

Sinful_Forgiver

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2023-08-02 Joined Global
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Sinful_Forgiver
Sinful_Forgiver
1 years ago
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curious what kind of trouble they will get into in chapter 5

Sinful_Forgiver
Sinful_Forgiver
1 years ago
Commented

gives sounds like home alone vibes but the burglars are the kids

Sinful_Forgiver
Sinful_Forgiver
1 years ago
Commented

Just a short story of mine. Let me know If I should turn this into a novel

Sinful_Forgiver
Sinful_Forgiver
1 years ago
Commented

Any useful feed back is much appreciated ! :)

Sinful_Forgiver
Sinful_Forgiver
1 years ago
Commented

I wish Patrick had a gun under his desk and shot the pursuers for some a good action scene in the first chapter. Everything else seems fine by me. I may have to read it again to give it a proper review.