Magnetic45

Does this have any romance? I hope it doesnt

Nice

Romance? Hope not

Romance?

I like it, its a nice change of pace from the cliche Villan novels. Where they just add romance for no reason. Its got a generic world building tho, I recomend that you dont take as much inspiration from other works. As you did with your other novel. Otherwise looks good

No problem👍🏼

The writing quality is actually pretty high in this book, cant say much about world building as it just started but. It seems promising. Now a few tips that i think could help are that, you probably shouldnt add any type of romance. With it not really making sense as the Mc is another species. And dont add a female Paragon as it will just feel forced and ruin the story. Also dont make the protagonist a hero or antihero that tries to save the world. Because i feel like its getting over used and wouldnt match the Mc personality. Now he dosent have to be a villain either. He could just be willing to do what it takes for his goal. But overall i like where the story is going.👍🏼

Now this was a very good start to a webnovel probably one of the best ones i have seen. Mc seems to be going towards the villan side which if so i would recommend, you probably dont use romance as i see it being over used in every genre. Which gets pretty annoying since most of the time its not even good. Cant say much about world building since the story just started. But it looks promising.