DystopicWorld

DystopicWorld

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2023-07-14 Joined Israel
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DystopicWorld
DystopicWorld
11 months ago
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Other than the misplaced dialogue tags here and there, the writing is more than fine. Although it's not a 5/5, it's not a 4/5 either, so I'll give it the benefit of the doubt. The chapters are very short for my preference, but the story is smooth, and with plenty of chapters to read, the length of individual chapters won't be an issue. It's not always that I find books of this style, especially with reference to real-life geography. It can be pretty challenging as it is easy to critique down the line, but I'm not one of those people. It's a muddy, harsh road if you want this type of book to develop around these corners, but you have my green light.

DystopicWorld
DystopicWorld
1 years ago
Posted

I’ll be cheering you on for your WSA entry, as I can see the potential in this lore. The prologue provides a clear direction and a fine briefing on what to expect from the ‘peak’ experts of this world. The words are easy to interpret, concise, and help the readers to grasp the settings of each scene without having to think too much. The information feedback is just as smooth with little fillers, especially when the characters are mentioned with little snippets of their past, present, and their expectations for the future. This is slowly building a web of information and connections, but if one isn’t careful enough and is simply reading for the sake of skimming through, it’s easy to be lost in the storytelling down the line.

DystopicWorld
DystopicWorld
1 years ago
Commented

Shadow Slave, Black Clover, and Tyranny of Steel references put together smoothly too, kinda catchy

The boy was no different. His name was Adam Constantine, a commoner from the Cormier Kingdom. As a child, he happened to come across a wandering Magus and learned that he had a talent for spell-casting.

Greatest Legacy of the Magus Universe

Greatest Legacy of the Magus Universe

Fantasy · Esenel