Thank you for your suggestions! I'll definitely keep them in mind moving forward.
Thanks for the suggestions, I'll try to rewrite some of them like you said.
ch 0 2 Ascension
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i love this [img=gift]
ch 0 5 Elite Blade Devil.
Action · Demons_and_I
great action, again so well written[img=recommend]
ch 0 3 Something New Under the Sun.
Action · Demons_and_I
I love the world and character description. But sometimes they are lengthy as not allowing any buildup of some kind in the story. But this is an introductory chapter and it's really written well [img=recommend]
ch 0 2 Life as it was, and as it is...
Action · Demons_and_I
very interesting lore [img=thinking]
ch 0 1 Prologue: The Thousand Millennium War... (2)
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ch 0 7 Chapter 6: Banquet (Part 2)
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"Never underestimate an Ashford." Zen said in a an extremely cold voice and then opened Mike's arm to the side.
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Mike totally lost his calm. His eyes were red with rage and he looked at Zen and his ridiculing smile. At this moment he lost it. Rage took over him and he attacked without thinking.
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Great Chapter!
ch 0 6 Chapter 5: Banquet (Part 1)
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|Whoosh| the punch was extremely fast. Everyone's breadth stopped. After throwing the punch, Mike felt odd. He was sure that he didn't feel anything but air. He was scared because he thought Zen was too weak to take the punch and he accidently killed Zen. He looked up and his eyes were wide opened. Zen just tilted his head to the side and avoided the punch closely.
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Mike:
Zen looked at Mike with indifferent expression. He knew he was at a disadvantage because Mike was first outer ring mutant with water attributes. Knowing that Zen was not a mutant, Mike had a cold smile.
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"Hey bro, everything alright? Are you constipated?" Zen asked with concern.
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Thanks! I will
Twilight Waning
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