"Leonora and Atticus" not "Leonora and Alistair" turned abruptly, as Alistair is not present
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Well, eyeglasses 👓😋
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Shouldn't that read "she *realized* she would have preferred"?
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"Fear and raged war within her" Is there a word missing perhaps?
"You beast! Why have you brought me here," Daphne seethed, forcing the words out. Fear and raged war within her. Her eyes darted to the fallen shards of the crystal beads, now coated with a thin layer of the man's crimson blood.
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I think this line is cut off from the previous paragraph.
they used to give Daphne.
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Daphne pulled one of Atticus's ears, causing him to wince. Daphne might have learned how to master magic, but the act of singing in tune still eluded her. But that was fine, Atticus loved her anyway, warbly tunes and all. When they had children, they would appreciate their mother's bad singing or they'd be disowned.
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Well, one would need to have at least a little bit of intelligence in the first place to lose it
"I have lost an arm, Hazelle, not my intelligence," Alistair's voice wasn't loud by any means but it still sent waves of fear into the poor woman who cowered in the corner of the room.
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this description is a thing of beauty
At the heart of the ring, the moonstone held secrets untold, revealing flashes of pearly blues, serene greens, and hints of delicate lavender. With every movement, the stone seemed to shift and change, captivating the imagination and inviting one to explore its otherworldly depths.
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deservedly so
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See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
The Devil's Betrothed
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