This is actually really helpful, believe it or not, i've been kind of sensing this from my writing but I just havent clocked it, i'll try and get better at this in the fututre chapters hope you stick around for it. Thanks again.
No giving up here, my other fanfiction takes up so much time, but i'll releas a new chapter this week. I promise
Yeah, sometimes i say that to make it easier for me to write but other times like you've already seen i try to depict the actual observation of the things with his sensess.
I get that you're angry, im not going to sugare coat it and say this was a good desition from my part but what I do know is that you could stick around and give me constructive feedback so i can produce better stories for you to read in the future. How does that sound mate?
"I love you. That is all that matters," I said, all of my resentments leaving my heart like a waterfall.
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Now that i read back on my writing, it does kind of sound cringy.Though i hope you still enjoyed vealor showing deamon who the boss is
"Undermine my mother one more time, and I'll make sure you understand why they call me the Butcher of the Red Waste," I said, holding the sword to his neck for a brief moment before slowly letting it down, drawing a bit of blood as he stood frozen in place, swallowing audibly.
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Yue and ignis are his first and seond hand, basically his generals
After that, I introduced him to both Yue and Ignis. They both took to him well enough, with Yue warming up to him more than Ignis.
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I will, all of the fanfictions i've started will be picked up at some point in time. but because i have my hands full with this one and the twilight fanfiction, thrones of storms and vikings are going to have to wait.
Thanks, I appreciate it, same to you
....Thanks i guess, still learning so if you could tell me exactly what made it rubbish, i can work on it in the future
A sage question. it's Vealor
Some of you may hate Vealor for being a little Gary Stu, but he deserves it after what I have put him through, so please be kind to him and, subsequently, to me.
House of The Dragon: The blind warrior
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