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Nice, good job so far. The story is a slow burn but I think it’s interesting to see how things develop and the way he learns how to properly use his core. This new ability has a lot of potential, I like the fact that it’s more closely related to runes, I wonder if he’ll be able to use them in a fight. The drama around the visit of the archon and whatever is happening in the camp also seems like an opportunity to have a bit of action, I really wanna see how he deals with problems. Evan seems like a hero archetype, honest and upright but not innocent; will he remain that way or will the life of a mage harden him? Keep it up author

Well, that’s quite the buildup in order for him to start using fire spells, I have high expectations considering how much time you’ve devoted to it. I think in the future it would be cool to explain a bit more of the power levels, what they mean, how they increase power and by how much. If you’re just planning to organically reveal that as the story progresses that’s also fine, I’m just curious. Keep it up author.

Nice, Tyftc. I would love to see Adam using his astral tyrant again soon! Also, please more chapters! Cheers

Nice, I like the diversity of the powers each individual has, very interesting. This fight has been pretty good. I personally think when there’s strategy and trickery in fights, it’s much more engaging for the reader. Don’t know if you’ve ever read hunter x, but I suggest reading it for inspiration, I think some of the fights in that manga are the best written ones I’ve ever read.

I would also say that if you can manage longer chapters or 2 chapters a day, you will have a much higher chance of attracting readers.

Cool. I’m wondering how this simulation power works exactly though, is it just a more detailed rendering of his surrounding within a certain range, or can it just simulate whatever he wants? Also, does he have to close his eyes every time he uses it or not?

Sure, I’ll give you a review after reading some more chapters, still too early to give an honest one.

Cool, really looking forward to who’s he’s going to make use of his abilities. Runes can be super powerful for making money and to fight. Seems like he will really need to learn how to fight though.

Nice, runes are so interesting, and there are so many ways he can use them to fight and become powerful. Has a lot of potential, hope you’re committed to this book author, the power system is interesting too!