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2022-12-01 Joined Malaysia
Did it mentioned any where - what his novel is about?
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Fantasy · zowji
Sleep I understand but not eating ?!
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Fantasy · zowji
Brotherly love? haha
thank you ~
But YuQiao ignored her and continued to walk forward. "Go straight and then turn left, always turn left and you will find the way out of the forest," shouted the old woman.
History · Sereinchoo
happy~
"Oh, why is there an unbound ghost here," said the old woman suddenly realizing YuQiao's presence.
History · Sereinchoo
Haha yeah - tried to make it more suspense at the end of that mini chapter
ch 0 4 Death
History · Sereinchoo
Thank you so much for the comment! Appreciated it ~ Xie Xie ni (thank you in Chinese)
maybe remove without moves - it sounds awkward, A guy entered the class, and went to his seat behind her. There was a moment of silence before he broke it and said, 'Hi'.*
A guy entered the class without any moves, he just went to his seat at the back of her. After a while of silence between them he said hi.
Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
Hmm what triggered the other student to remark her like that? Do they know about her background etc? People usually target appearance or background when insulting. Single mom, single daughter, ugly hair, acne face etc
"What a pitiful creature," remarked a student.
Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
Wondering what he says to her - he inquire her ... hmm
As I navigate through the halls of the high school, I encounter an individual who possesses an impressive stature, fair complexion, captivating black eyes, rosy lips, a well-defined nose, and a neatly pressed uniform. He inquires about my presence, and his voice resonates like an echo, captivating my senses. I am able to perceive the sweetness of his voice, which induces a quickened heartbeat within me.
Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
explain about her uniform - previous school has or doesn't have uniform and now she has one and it was quite stifling (will also shows us Ummi's personality)
What sets my new high school apart is its commitment to experiential learning. Besides traditional classroom instruction, it offers opportunities for field trips, community service projects, and internships. These real-world experiences allow students to apply their theoretical knowledge in practical scenarios, sparking a sense of curiosity, innovation, and critical thinking that extends beyond the confines of the school walls. Whether it be visiting a local museum or volunteering at a homeless shelter, my new high school encourages us to be active participants in our community and make a positive impact on the world around us.
Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
These few paragraphs feels like infodump - it doesn't give any clues about Ummi as a person, it praises the school and in what context? will this relates back to anything that will happen later? like if she is interested in Math then there's a Math Competition which she interested to join later/and it will create another opportunity for the two to meet.
Moreover, my new high school places a strong emphasis on fostering a supportive and inclusive environment. With a rich cultural tapestry of students from diverse backgrounds, it promotes unity and respect among all members of the school community. The administration actively encourages dialogue and organizes cultural events, ensuring that every student feels appreciated and valued. This commitment to inclusivity allows me to broaden my horizons, learn from others, and celebrate the beauty of diversity.
Teen · AbdulfatahFatima
The premise was interesting - a transmigrated author, it has a lot of potential. The opening was quite relatable, although I hope that there's a bit more of what the author is working on (his novel) so that I could have a better grasp of the world that he is transmigrated to, so I could understand his choices a bit better.
The Transmigrated Author
Fantasy · zowji