Why a system, why be Hansen
Completely butchering itachis character, ranting and filling chapters with pointless and repetitive ai generated details… Thought I was in for a cold calculating protagonist, not an emotionally driven child stuck pondering his irrelevant past.
U baiting now?
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It’s fine… you book is pretty great. The abyss world was a bit of a slump though. While thing is similar to ‘journey of the fate destroying emperor’
What is this repeated stuff I’m paying for
It’s fine I don’t need to know… as long as it’s articulated and displayed well in the novel theirs no point in discussions
I understand them having a friendly bias within each other due to seeing themselves or their hardships in one another… but within like 24 hours that bias turned into an intense life and death realtionship. I just felt it was to fast. While I just thought of the ghost turning evil as I guess taking damage and it’s effect would be reduced in reality due to the previous rule. And the fact this outcome was in a trial rather than seemingly reality
Also the reward from the tower seem unfair… sure aquiring mythic rarity is fine though you don’t do a good job disinguishimg the rarity with power level… I don’t believe he should get tier 9 things when he’s tier 2-3 even though he can fight higher tier existence… the rational for his strength seems odd as well… they way your describe it, you can tier up as long as you know how and have a stat that is the pinnacle of the current tier… so increased power beyond your tier is fine as long as you have multiple stats at the pinnacle of your tier… idk
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original TBATE (Dumb Brother)
Reborn as Arthur Leywins twin brother... with knowledge of the future. Loki wishes to make the most out of a world filled with the mystical energy of this world and reach for the stars. I just write random stories on google docs and copy/paste three pages a chapter. I write on my phone and dont check grammer or spelling at all... id only continue this story and others if theres a good response.12 Chs 32 Collections
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SuperGene body mind soul
Reborn in the future or rather the supergene multiverse or genoverse... with the knowledge of the alliances ancient language and the future. The path forward is clear but transcending mortal boundaries without interrupting fate. Ren needs to find his own path to reach the pinnacle and beyond. I just write random stories on google docs and copy/paste three pages a chapter. I write on my phone and dont check grammer or spelling at all... id only continue this story and others if theres a good response.23 Chs 56 Collections
You switch between 1st and 3rd person. Try to stick to one or the other not both. Also it feels like your just gonna rewrite the original story, with minor deviations to have a stronger mc.
Supergene: I will be the strongest
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