There are a few minor typos, such as "Mijolnir" instead of "Mjolnir" and "their" instead of "them" in the sentence "They had betrayed them, all of their." In some cases, words that should be capitalized are written in lowercase. For instance, "system" and "portals" should be capitalized since they refer to specific entities within the context of the story. There are a few more minor mistakes that can be easily corrected. Overall, the writing is engaging and well-crafted, and these small adjustments will help improve its clarity and coherence.
this is useful I'd say
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Fantasy · Lyk_novel
you mean Resurrector?
Seated on the throne, Daniel, the Resurretor waited for him. The visor of his helmet raised to reveal his golden eyes. The white armor was polished, the silver spear stuck out in front of him.
Fantasy · Lyk_novel
Tbh I kinda like it, the story flows smooth but the transition is not good, you dont need a line of "-" or "*" to switch to different scene. but overall is pretty good 👍
scary 😨
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LGBT+ · Flattened_Rice_007
that was short, but i like it 🥴
idk why but i keep reading Luan as "Juan"
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LGBT+ · Flattened_Rice_007
the same thing happened when i go to toilet. while im doing my business, i heard a sound across the room. really scary bro, i fkin sprint to my room [img=nervous][img=nervous]
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LGBT+ · Flattened_Rice_007
sorry but im not, maybe because of the memes
Moonlit Identity [BL]
LGBT+ · Flattened_Rice_007