therock

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therock
4 months ago
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The writing is excellent, no doubt. Even though I'm on chapter 55 it's definitely a story that stands out from the others, of course it has quite visible mistakes, Mikoto development is quite null so far I'll probably have to rewrite my review if something happens. Dear author, your way of describing everything is certainly out of the ordinary but doing it every chapter for unimportant things is certainly tedious for me, the development of the other characters is not great either, almost null except for Agatha. The abrupt changes of perspective is also a problem, but as I say, I have yet to read the other half of the story. Too many names without any importance and well the dialogues are not bad but definitely can be improved. But it was definitely a good read.

therock
therock
5 months ago
Replied to Josh_Wawrzy

Thank you! for the corrections

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Fantasy · therock

therock
therock
therock
1 years ago
Replied to HENROX

ok i'll edit it thanks for the suggestion

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    The one intended to protect

    Fantasy ACTION ADVENTURE REINCARNATION SYSTEM SURVIVAL VIDEOGAME NO-HAREM WIZARDS RIGHTEOUS NPC

    Marcus, a guard of a rich house, has been interested in a new game for sale called “Fantasia” because the functions were unusual for him. The system offered you three different class options tailored to your tastes or what you wanted to be. [Guardian of the capital] [Rare class]. A prestige position you will make sure that no monster or suspicious person passes the gates of the capital at any cost including your life. [This class can evolve]. [Dungeon guardian] [Rare class]. You make sure that no monster leaves the dungeon and that no adventurer passes without paying. [This class can evolve]. [Progressive guardian] [Rare class]. You will start from the bottom of a guard, but you will also be able to climb from the top of the guard job. [This class can evolve.] But the world of “Fantasia” was more than just hunting monsters, manufacturing monsters or waging great wars, you could say that it was child's play. This novel will contain several delicate issues.

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    Reincarnated as a dwarf blacksmith npc

    Fantasy REINCARNATION SYSTEM MAGIC NONHUMAN VIDEOGAME NPC

    Castor was a man with a good job, so he never had to worry about the money he was not interested in games until he saw the trailer of a game called Fancy, he had never felt that excitement. When he finished watching the trailer he bought the game and waited for the expected day to arrive and started playing until the 8-hour time limit was up, he was excited and happy, he had really enjoyed the game. Over the years, he became a veteran of the game and was well-respected by the gaming community. He helped whoever he could, he couldn't dedicate all his time to the game, but when he played he enjoyed it as if it was the first time. Although the game was not as successful as expected it had the necessary success but as the years went by the players were leaving the game did not receive many updates, but this never bothered Castor he had reached the maximum level of all professions and races now he only needed to reach the maximum level of dwarf and blacksmith they were going to add it in the next update, so he was excited. He thought today was going to be a normal day, but when he logged in, he got a big screen that said. "The game servers are going to close tomorrow so sorry for the late notice to reward you a little bit you can use all the items in the game, and you can max out your character hope you enjoy it special thanks to Castor for always playing our game sorry great player." When he read that he was immediately sad, but now he had to enjoy himself to the fullest he saw that there were many more players he played and played until the imminent end came thousands of players gathered he saw familiar faces he had not seen in a long time he was happy but so sad. A big black screen appeared, it was all over, what was he going to do now? I was so sad, but I had heard that a new game was coming out, I was going to check it out, but now I had to give it all up I needed a break. Time passed quickly, it had been a year since they closed the game, and he had given himself a big break, so he took a look at the game he had heard had already come out a few months ago, and it looked excellent, so he bought it. The capsule arrived, and he saw that the interface was similar to the fantasy he looked at the interface again he wanted to be a dwarf as a blacksmith the game warned him that blacksmithing and dwarves were very difficult, but he didn't care. He had his character ready and wanted to appear randomly in fantasy he just wanted to have fun but in this game, he wants to be the best even if it is very difficult. He appeared in a snowy biome full of mountains, and saw his surroundings a little more there was a house that came in it was cozy as if he had been there a long time ago he explored more there was a blacksmith shop with everything needed for a blacksmith.

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