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LucyXiong
female LV 12Aspring writer working hard to share my stories and passion with the world. Some will be wholesome filled with rainbows and butterflies. Others will be very dark and show the ugliness that can be.
2022-02-07 Joined United States
Epic chapter! Woot woot!
"look at be my friend"?
"Giken," I whispered, finally recognizing his face as I came back to my senses, " Please…Giken…look at be my friend… he is hurt. Please save my friend." I cried, and for the first time in such a long time, as our eyes locked.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
the sparks flew from her what?
"NOOOO!" I screamed, and as if it were magic, time slowed down into a motionless pause. All I saw moving was a bright light that bursted from within me as my screams turned into a roar, batting the arrow out of my way. Sparks flew from my white emitting light and traveled into the shape of a dragon, electrocuting everything in its path toward Bjork in white ultraviolet rays.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
if he's saying it, shouldn't it be "myself" not "himself"?
"Now the hard part, cutting through all the ropes to finally loosen himself." He said out loud to give himself more spirit. Again, hours went by. It wasn't until midday when he finally fell through the ropes, only to land onto the hard ground.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
There's a floating quotation mark.
Again, I find myself running and asking myself, "Where is Jerell?" No time to wait, run towards the smoke. Bjork is here… that means he was fleeing whoever was camping. Run there." I was telling myself.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
The last sentence seems unfinished
"Ma'iingan let ancestors do fate. Ma'iingan not help you. Fate be with you side." Giken said loudly as he continued to shout curses. "Mawine aaniin dash…Attack, why? He attacked! Now you not safe for Ma'iingan!" on and on he tried.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
maws is a mouth, I think you meant mauls
A very ugly man pops out of the bushes, swinging around a scythe, while hopping on one foot. Giken charges at the man and knocks the wind out of him. Giken's paw maws the man down and rests heavily on his chest as Giken growls viciously down at the guy, saliva spewing all over the man's face.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
I think ypu meant "muzzle" not "nozzle".
Giken sniffs the air to try to get a better whiff of this person, but couldn't get much of it's scent. So with his nozzle he shuffled the leaves on the ground that was blown his way. Just then an arrow flies past just above his head, almost grazing his scalp right before it embedded itself into the wolf standing directly behind him.
Alpha Of The Ma’iingan
Fantasy · DexderXiong
Ooo!
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original Complete Silence
An abused child grows up believing that in order to be strong and survive, the world must not know who you are. And so a secret the child will carry, but only time will tell just how long the secret will last. But the abuse manifests into major psychological trauma wherein awakens a unique power in which very few hold. Is the power to be something good or will it bring nothing but death to enemies, and those ones hold dear? For death does not discriminate, taking all who come near. Will the child find fairytales, adventure and love to be nothing but stories, or will they unfold into something more than could ever be asked for? __________ A/N: My apologies to my readers. I am currently going back over the story and editing it to make it a better read. I will be taking a hiatus until I have everything fixed and the book is complete. I sincerely apologize for the inconvenience.111 Chs 24 Collections
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Knight My Lady
Completed
Charlix has low self esteem and doesn't believe in fairy tales and love. She lives like a knight to protect her childhood friend who is betrothed to the Crown Prince. When forced to attend the Royal ball, Charlix accidentally overheard something she should not have. In an ill fate, she fought against a hooded stranger that ended up leaving her in a peculiar situation. Waking up to find herself in her best friends body, she sets off to find out what happened. For the first time, she starts to fall in love, but was the love meant for her?102 Chs 72 Collections
Thank you. I'm actually working on updating the book and making it a better read.
Knight My Lady
Fantasy · LucyXiong