David_Orchard - Profile

This is a breath of fresh air. I love it. Normally I'm over critical about grammar, but I think the story does a great job. I never expected to enjoy this that much. I laughed so hard at some of the sayings the undead used. there were also some pretty unexpected plot twists. Nice job!!

The story is good, but I feel like the MC is a little wishy washy when it comes to his humanity. He is written as a psychopath and this brilliant assassin, but at times he is illogically stupid. There's also the bit about him finding humanity, losing it, and finding it again at what I thought were unnecessary times. Personally, it just kind of made the MC feel artificial, not totally bad but not great either. I liked how the world building played out. I thought that it was well done with different factions and incorporating multiple facets from an apocalyptic world. I really only have two major critiques. Firstly, there are large parts where I feel there is a step forward in plot, five steps back with long info dumps or a random background story, and then a mad rush of 10 steps forward with plot. I'm sure there's a grand design, but there were whole chapters at times that I just skipped. There were definitely some plot twists that I never saw coming though coupled with some pretty entertaining dialogues as well. My second critique is mostly grammar. By no means is it bad, but there are times when the completely wrong word is used or an occasional character name switch. Again, not the worst, it would just sometimes break my flow. The story as a whole is enjoyable. Thank you for your hard work. I was honestly surprised on how fast you could push out content.

I am somewhere around chapter 130 now, but the grammar is killing me. There are so many tense issues and spelling mishaps. I get that English is a brutal language, but any editor should be able to pick those errors out. Otherwise, I am enjoying the story.

I have read up to chapter 300 now. I have to say the bit about the use of Evan's name too much has been resolved . It's a good story. there's still some cringe, but I am enjoying it.

I have now read up to chapter 100 with the intention of reading on, but I do have some grievances. Firstly, Evans's name gets used way too much. It breaks the story when you are reading "Evan" what feels like every other word in some paragraphs. Secondly, some of the sentences need commas. I realize this is just me being a grammar snob, but it becomes distracting sometimes. Finally, sometimes I feel like the stuff that Evan says is almost too childish or poorly structured enough for me to be like wow. My biggest example of this is when he is talking about Lady Luck's Temple. The phrasing is bad. Otherwise, the novel shows promise for my current trope vibes. I will continue reading with the hope that the author gets better. I understand that English is a brutal language to learn, so overall you are doing a good job. Thank you for writing. I look forward to reading further. I will try to update my score if my opinions change or there is improvement