_Ismael_

The beginning of the novel is good. Your approach of making the introduction(chapter 0) philosophical is intriguing. As I read further, I found the build up to be good too, even though I thought some things were odd, but that didn't affect the quality and flow. The scenes are interesting and that seems to be your strongest point so far, like, you are very good at writing moments. The problem I had in the middle is how much of it was "filler". A decent bit of it was character information and skill information (system time) that didn't really move things ahead but rather slowed them down and broke my immersion. I can't say much about the character design since there's not much to go off of. Most of the beginning was action and it's in the most recent chapters that you started showing his initial disposition. I guess we'll see...