DaoistMagician

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DaoistMagician
DaoistMagician
1 years ago
Commented

WTF? I totally confused, what logic is it she is experienced, but virgin, what is magical surge has to do with it? Someone help

Nyx landed softly on his rod, plunging Adam into pleasure. He narrowed his eyes as the walls of her vagina began to squeeze him from all sides. It was obvious she was experienced, and given her lack of magical surge, Adam could assume she was a virgin.

My interracial harem of beautiful queens

My interracial harem of beautiful queens

Fantasy · MisterBombastic

DaoistMagician
DaoistMagician
2 years ago
Commented

Author, please consider more carefully about characters' inroduction. Because for me personally story too rushed. I can't remember names of many people because they introduced too briefly and only once before and then pop up here and there occasionaly. Even though Cultivator with modern AI ,personally for me, is too fast-paced but it flow of the story more natural. Chen Li's women or in-the-future-to-be women introduced too many at once and they just kept popping up. I feel like it all too forced because Xia Tian's harem appear to have equal number of memders as Chen Li's but Xia Tian's story is ≈200 chapters while Chen Li's ≈100. I feel like Chen Li's story is too compressed and many things missing in between. Also story is good but I have a feeling like reading a brief retelling of Chen Li's story. Huft. That's all. Phew.

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DaoistMagician
DaoistMagician
2 years ago
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Congrats! 200 chapters! Author is awesome! Great support for future achivements! YAY![img=update][img=update][img=update]

DaoistMagician
DaoistMagician
2 years ago
Replied to SocialHippo

I think rewriting isn't necessary; Because Lith reaction on Arya's prank is quite natural for a straight men(being suspected in this way by goddess like Arya is quite shoking and suposed reaction is quick and absolute denying). Lith may be smart and all but he is not a robot, so mistakes is natural thing. And Arya's teasing is another thing altogether. PS sorry if there is mistakes, English is not my native language. Everything above is just my thoughts. I just wanted give you, Author, another point of view.

Except Lith, he was almost a professional in the aspect of not getting teased. His mother had trained him well and, in his opinion, his teacher, Arya, wasn't anywhere near close to the level of his mother.

Vampire's Slice Of Life

Vampire's Slice Of Life

Fantasy · SocialHippo

DaoistMagician
DaoistMagician
2 years ago
Commented

Really funny how world works, THAKS to Author's birthday yesterday, today I enjoyed double chapters of double chapters for this week, when also today happens to be my birthday too[img=recommend][img=update]. Pay my respect for good work of Author.

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