Did you copy this off from Were's Harry by DobbyElfLord? Have some shame before creating a Pat.
Glad to help, brother. Just don't stop writing, read a lot of stories for research, copy their writing style, and before long you'd be a good writer yourself.
Here's my honest feedback up to this point: You need to go into more detail. Up until now, it reads like a summary of events (which leaves out a lot of things). If you are summarizing a story, it shouldn't be done after the first chapter/prologue. I can give you a few points I noted: it says that the MC received orders from governments, but it didn't talk about things like where the factory was set up, how the raw material was procured, and how much time it took for the development of the products, when do you have to deliver the weapons? Then there are other things like before selling weapons to any foreign government you'd have to get permission from the Indian government. Your idea is very good, but the execution is very haphazard.
Thank you so much for listening to your readers. In an age where everyone is only concerned about maximizing their wealth, you're actually listening to your readers and I love that. I'll definitely subscribe. All the best man!
14. Takeshi hates bugs.
Naruto: Faint Smile.
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
I think it was established from the beginning of the story that the MC is not perfect. Just because he has life experience doesn't mean he can't get angry or behave irrationally. (Moreover, he doesn't even have life experience, only deja vu.)
I know it's not illegal, but it does paint a picture of what kind of man he is. When a child is shown 'love' for the first time by an adult who has power over them, they don't think they have the right to deny them. Watch 'May December' where such a dynamic is explored wonderfully.
"Wait, Woody Allen directed and wrote this?" One user's avatar frowned. "Isn't he the one who…?" They trailed off, but their disapproval was clear. "Well, I'll still watch it—for Lucas, but I don't condone Woody Allen."
Tycoon Actor in Hollywood
Movies · NewComer714
Josh 2000 Mohabbatein 2000 K3G 2001 Dil Chahta Hai 2001 Lagaan 2001 Raaz 2002 Saathiya 2002 Ishq Vishq 2003 Munnabhai MBBS 2003 Murder 2004 Just to begin with. Although I'm with others here, you should focus on one story.
2. First movie?
India: First PM of India
History · FanficWorld07
Dude? I didn't realize Hogwarts was in the USA, mate.
"Dude," Jeremy interrupted amusedly, "it's still two hours to curfew. Why'd you run?"
HP: The Otherworlder
Book&Literature · BS6SC
This story is a blatant copy of one of my favorite fics 'Were's Harry' by DobbyElfLord on FFN. The shameless person won't even say that and has even created a P@treon. He'll probably delete my review in a few days, but I wanted as many people as possible to report him for plagiarizing as I am.
HP : Harry The Hero
Book&Literature · KUROSAKI_Megumi