Signature weapon, a kind of typical plot on a fantasy genre however, this is the first time I see this being use in an omegaverse novel, I like it, such an innovative idea you use for your book even though it is cliche or a typical thing on a fantasy novel but you use it on an omegaverse novel which almost all of those stories are modern and no such "Signature Weapon" and the main character truly shouts OP.
I see I see I am blind when my Fav character is on that sceneeeeeee OwO
In summary of my 20 comments for your 20 chapters, I love the story even though some scenarios are cliche you still succeed to twist it and writing something unexpected and original. The words are chosen well, and used well, as the emotions that each character has I can feel it and the design I can imagine it. But again, the spacing, the use of commas, the spelling (just a little bit), and the capitalization of i. Lastly, I have a recommendation for you or a tip maybe. you used deep or not too simple English words or not common to some or many readers, you also use some mythological entities out there, and many more. Therefore, I suggest you used to try to make a dictionary-like or when the chapter will end, on the last past you will put certain words and for example: Uriel- is the blah blah blah Rah- is the blah blah blah Husky- blah blah blah Enigma- blah blah blah And also try to add the words or the race you created in this novel, I forgot the name of the enemy they are fighting like the one starting with a, 4.4 this is my review for your novel "Tryst Under The War" with 20 chapters for now.
PERFECT ROMANTIC CHAPTER! okay, the sit on my lap!!!!!! and the male lead cooking for the main character ahemmmm green flag!!!!!!!!!!!!! let the male lead seduce the main character or the other way around!!!!! and then a wild chapter will bless us!
Is it now???? or the next chapter for theeeee ahem ahem my critique is informal now but it's not my fault hehe, I will not rate this but I feel the moneyyyy moneyyy rich vibes daddy and marriage ummmm YES jk hehe, and, heat? ahhhhh!!!! bai bai see you in chapter 20!
"Wanna try it out on the bed." AHHHHH! okay Chris and Vinanciel I ship both of them my favorite character and that enigmaaaa AHHHH! okay okay now everything is connected not completely, is it truly a fight against the Gods or not?
Don't be surprised I am a fast reader,, especially at night HAHAHAHA, another fight an actual fight against A DEITY AND A HUMAN COMMANDERRRRR!!!!!! ahhhh okay okay and it's my favorite character in this book ahhhhh! ahem I will give it another 5 sorry no more to comment, because I love the character so much then mortal vs immortal sheeshh okay yo ugot it now.
VINANCIEL IS WHAT!!!!! okay commander (right?) This is unexpected again. I will give you another 5 because I love this character his personality and then omg he is also a commander? AHHHHHH! okay ahem, the main character is lucky to have him as a friend. Okay the words I give it a 5, the flow of the story I give it a 5, and the characters I give it a 5! okay there done my rating is done as 5!
I gave it a 5, you received 5 three times from me now. Ummm ahhhh! spicy omg~! ahem I need to be formal. I love the words that were used in this chapter and, the sudden cute seductive bunny (jk or not) and the cute beast (hehehehhehehhe) ahem kiss and do more omg! this is too earlyyyyyyy.
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original The Easteria & The "Empress"
The Easteria one of the 7 continents of Eclorld, a land with an vast amount of magic & mana along with warriors bearing great strength and exceedingly large wealth to all empires here with an absolute fertility for generations. The "Empress" of Acun Empire one of the 12 empires of Easteria, a new page for his legacy being the only son of Lucian Herean the head of House Herean and Jare the Priestess of Acun, Friend with Easoon Empire Royalties, Chosen by the former "Emperor & Empress", Born with the magic of the God of New, The 100th and youngest "Empress" of Acun, And the Partner of the Current Emperor which was his friend before. Along with the mysteries of the Old and New, what would've been the present situation of the people with endless unanswered mysteries of Eclorld, mysteries of Eclorth, mysteries of Goddess of Old and God of New, mysteries of Easteria, mysteries of House of Novun and House of Herean. Can the "Empress" find all the answers for the sake of their present life?200 Chs 12 Collections
First of all, that was unexpected a duel between omegas in a combat duel I like it and rather than use gladiators sword you need to do some research about the weapons or kinds of swords that gladiators used like the Gladius, and Siccae, Gladius graceus, and more.
Tryst Under The War [BL, Omegaverse,Action]
LGBT+ · ChaosBride