was it that bad? Should I rewrite the first dozen chapters?
i dropped this. the premise wss interesting but the quest, plot, mc, characters and world building dont show much potential even if the authors writing is unrefined. I cut the author enough slack because when i started my novel it was similiar but chapter by chapter it got better snd I dove into the world i was writting making it fully my own creation even thought I initially built upon the work of someone else and the novel is under the fan fic category
Tron had almost lost his thoughts completely after seeing Sethra die.
My Muscles Adapt 10,000 Times Faster
Fantasy · RagingArtPunk
vampires pierce the skin with their teeth and then drink like humans could
'Vampires feed on blood, sucking it through their nails. They are capable of conversation, and have intellectual capabilities. Found in the Parag Continent, but are rumored to be violently hostile and territorial. Fabled to possess immortality.'
Born in Blood
Fantasy · CovidCandy
I recognise the prana one. a bunch of earthlings isekai to the world of a novel they read and its very very hard to survive the world building. Humans live on a giant mammoth snd its very cool but didnt finish it
'Through 'Ora', the miraculous world essence that gives any worthy being the chance to harness its groundbreaking strength. 'Ora' is all around us. In the air, in the ground, in everything.'
Born in Blood
Fantasy · CovidCandy
Is this a world where commoners can all read? makes it illogical since they would need to attend school for that and the rest you can think for yourself
Eve picked up a few children's books and showed them to Liam, but his eyes were already fixed on three different covers.
Born in Blood
Fantasy · CovidCandy
Seven: 5 years old. An A.I. assistant for the Reviewer System that helps Togiri navigate the system. A copy of Togiri's personality before he changed to his current self. Recently gained a body in Togiri's consciousness.
Hunter X Hunter - Reviewers Rage
Anime & Comics · Vernable_Reviewer
How he previously looked
Togiri: 13 (26) years old. A person everyone wants to have in their corner, but few do.
Hunter X Hunter - Reviewers Rage
Anime & Comics · Vernable_Reviewer
Tsuchi: 32 years old. The oldest of the first shadow squad. Despite his big size and strength, Tsuchi is a gentle giant outside of battle. He's often seen quietly meditating, though once in combat, he becomes a force of nature, leveling anything in his path.
Hunter X Hunter - Reviewers Rage
Anime & Comics · Vernable_Reviewer
Jinrai: 29. He was born in the wrong time. He uses Dual revolvers and is a modern cowboy. He is calm but carries a dark sense of humor. He's known for cracking jokes mid-fight, though his laid-back demeanor hides a sharp mind.
Hunter X Hunter - Reviewers Rage
Anime & Comics · Vernable_Reviewer
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original Hunter X Hunter - Reviewers Rage
An original story in the world of Hunter x Hunter. Togiri, a loser becoming famous for his harsh Reviews of novels, tv shows, movies and all other kinds of entertainment becomes famous. One day he is noticed by a group of transcendental beings. These higher beings have allowed Togiri's deepest wishes to come true: transmigration, reincarnation — ISEKAI. But there was a catch. He needed to train and fight them after his death in his chosen world. Everytime he lost, Togiri's memories were wiped away and this process was repeated, until his entertainment value wasn't worth anything anymore. In this life cycle he was granted the authority to create his own cheat system that would allow him to grow stronger. Togiri was happy to start his new easy life where he enjoy the benefits of being overpowered and not work hard, but to his naivety the gods controlling his fate for eons weren't so simple. As a 'little' motivation, billions of memories entered his brain of the life's when he slacked and didn't train. His friends dying at his feet, his wife's from different lifes dying in his arms and his children being torn limb from limb and screaming in anguish as the light extinguished in their eyes. Once arrived in the world Togiri's heart almost exploded from anger and grief and he punched the ground ceasingly until his bone could be seen. The system sealed 99% of its capabilities to only seal ⅔ of Togiri's painful memories away. Constantly wearing a mask to deceive others and the only moment he puts it down is when he as his alter Ego, the Blue Demon is tearing through flesh and killing thousands. Some may think this is a light hearted novel with an op mc story — no it isn't. First system that is every changing and can 3 options to choose from. The Hero option, Villian option or Legend option. The mc will train and visit multiple worlds, but I don't want to make the novel too fast paced especially the first volume he spends in the Hunter x Hunter World. it's the foundation. I will try to keep it under 400 chapters Also the mc will do the Hunter Exam with Gon and the others but after that he will seperate because his goals differ way too much, but meeting a few characters from Hunter x Hunter through out the story is possible68 Chs 408 Collections
thank you for your sincerity. Similiar to how I dislike other novels where the mc doesn't show much of his personality but only tid bits, I did the same. I thought improving the overall novel later on was good enough but if I can't even keep the interest of the reader after ten chapters then I should analyse and improve the novel from the start. But it's not as if I'm releasing daily or even weekly anymore. I should start work on my consistency first
Hunter X Hunter - Reviewers Rage
Anime & Comics · Vernable_Reviewer