ScorpianRed

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Currently possessing the curse of 30, with 30 chapters I can no longer write ;(

2021-08-10 Joined Brazil
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ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
1 months ago
Replied to Riski_Bambang

It's not bad, just some structures that look weird

Lein emphasized that merging their floating islands did not mean destroying individual islands. Instead, it meant staying within the same area so that if any member needed help, others could quickly provide support. This created a strong sense of community and solidarity among members.

Floating Island - Triple S Talent

Floating Island - Triple S Talent

Games · Riski_Bambang

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
1 months ago
Commented

It looks like a lot of response from the gpt chat, while I'm not against it, maybe a change in them could be more interesting, I wasn't going to comment, but since I've already gotten this far

Lein emphasized that merging their floating islands did not mean destroying individual islands. Instead, it meant staying within the same area so that if any member needed help, others could quickly provide support. This created a strong sense of community and solidarity among members.

Floating Island - Triple S Talent

Floating Island - Triple S Talent

Games · Riski_Bambang

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

first can is not necessary, or rather, it does not make sense

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

. ≠ , higher up Those in the middle of the sentence, without need

When 5 of those hawk Monsters got killed by the Emperor, suddenly other Monsters realized what was happening. so they wanted to turn around to counterattack. Unfortunately for them, before they can do anything almost 20 bullets hit those remaining 5 Monsters.

While everyone is Cultivating, I am playing an RPG game

While everyone is Cultivating, I am playing an RPG game

Fantasy · Small_Otaku

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

techer or teacher? the discord link is expired, you have to put it so it doesn't expire

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Replied to Small_Otaku

There are several of these throughout, but everything in the same paragraph was very strange, I think the only time it was used correctly was at the beginning, man, creating is hard, but don't give up

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

Did you mean interface?

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

If this paragraph is correct, it conflicts with the next paragraph, and it appears that Xin was using the stick

Xin then thought that it would be best to battle him with a more serious attacks. Thinking of it, he made his staff to swirl and then prepared for an all-out battle.

Global Awakening: My Clones Have Different Classes

Global Awakening: My Clones Have Different Classes

Action · pantserplotter

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

It could be written in a better way, avoiding one person's speech and describing another person afterwards, well, taking into account the perspective, the way it was done here it seems a bit confusing, well, I say avoid the annoying people from the web novel who pick on grammar

He rotated his staff then dashed towards the Xin. The enemy went again in the offensive but this time around, Xin was also in the offensive. Xin smashed his staff and the enemy deflected it with weapon . Another smash was made but he received it with his staff.

Global Awakening: My Clones Have Different Classes

Global Awakening: My Clones Have Different Classes

Action · pantserplotter

ScorpianRed
ScorpianRed
2 months ago
Commented

There's something missing here

The referee made them approach each other and then while approaching, Zoan was cracking his neck and knuckles. can only smirk at the moment. It was then, they shook hands with each other. The referee then stated the rules in combat without delays.

Global Awakening: My Clones Have Different Classes

Global Awakening: My Clones Have Different Classes

Action · pantserplotter

  • Tales of a Newbie Dungeon Master original

    Tales of a Newbie Dungeon Master

    Fantasy SYSTEM SLICEOFLIFE KINGDOMBUILDING LEVELUP

    In a world that has recently adjusted to the emergence of monsters and magic, a select portion of the population is chosen to shoulder the responsibility of designing and enhancing dungeons, progressively introducing greater challenges and rewards. Their achievements harbor the potential to fulfill their deepest wishes—whether that entails status, wealth, power, or even the elusive prospect of immortality. Embark on the journey of a young individual who has just entered this society, endeavoring to adapt to the new reality and the possibilities that have been bestowed upon them. Join them as they navigate the intricate nuances of this transformed world and bear witness to their voyage toward triumph or adversity. Image generated via AI Discord: https://discord.gg/tfkDUggnSd

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