Andry_Reyes

Andry_Reyes

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Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
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It was an enjoyable read. The writing isn't the best but it was enough to keep me reading. There were some phrases that could be rephrased, and some paragraphs could be split to make it reader-friendly, but all of these problems could be fixed by just continuing to write. Other than that, the premise kept me hook and I will definitely come back here for more

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

Good start so far. Some paragraphs could be split into more and some better wording, but I'm enjoying it.

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

Omoshiroi

Unfortunately for him, he was now intangible and was unable to grasp any physical object that could stop him from being sucked into the terrifying portal.

please reset the booktitle IAmGuavaFruit 20231218092329 21

please reset the booktitle IAmGuavaFruit 20231218092329 21

Fantasy · IAmGuavaFruit

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

Dying alone is scary...

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

Great start so far, but I'd split this paragraph into 2. Readers hate wall of text

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Superpower Evolution

Superpower Evolution

Urban · Xiaoru

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

hmmm it's already chapter 10 huh... I swear it was shorter (in a good way of course)

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Realistic · XXXXC

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

5 chapters in and it's a good so far. The writing quality isn't perfect(although nothing is flawless) I want see an improvement with the writing quality.

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

I'm loving this so far! And uhh... try to split those long paragraphs. Wall of text isn't appealing to readers.

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

Hmm... Kinda resembles the setting of Big Hero 6. The word choice is a bit iffy here tho

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Sparror Volume 1

Sparror Volume 1

Fantasy · JJ_Prakoso

Andry_Reyes
Andry_Reyes
3 years ago
Commented

Character design definitely one of this novel's strong point.

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Realistic · XXXXC

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