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So, have you actually read this fanfic, or did you just decide to give a random 2* review and complain about the anime?

I'm really happy you took my feedback as constructive, I wasn't trying to moan as I know how hard writing is in English - I can't imagine how hard it would be in a second or third language. I've really enjoyed your work on the whole, and I hope I can in the future too. If not, then it is just not for my taste, and that's fine. Either way, I hope you continue to find success :)

Let me preface this by saying I originally really enjoyed the novel, even becoming an early Patron, however I've been disappointed with the recent chapters. The initial 85 chapters were a solid 5/5 for me, but the last 25 have dropped to a 2/5. The narrative has become cluttered with feature creep, straying from "show, don't tell" to just "tell". --- Pacing was slow, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, however recently there's been a loss of focus on "Hollywood", becoming bogged down with so many tangents with the retelling of comics, manga, recipes, and the slightly cringey events like charity events and concerts where the protagonist's perfection has become overly exaggerated with his Gary-Stu-ness kicked up into overdrive. Although slightly disappointing, this wasn't too big of a deal, because I was hoping to see that same level of detail when it finally came to the second movie arc, which I was eager to see. --- However this is where the pacing abruptly sped up. Unlike the first movie arc, this time all the vital intricate details were skipped like casting, scouting locations, production, etc. Large time skips were employed, using recaps instead of showing the events. When the movie is ultimately described, it's a mess with unclear descriptions, confusing plots, characters/actors who abruptly appear without any word about them previously. I'm sorry to say it's quite disappointing that a novel about Hollywood movies has evolved into something where the actual movies are seemingly an after thought. --- Maybe it's just me, but I'd far prefer more interactions between the protagonist and the other characters. More detail about the movies and their development - casting, planning, filming, etc. More interactions with the women in his life (the Japanese LI has been completely side-lined). More challenges. Reducing the emphasis on needless events, concerts, retelling of manga/comics, and fewer diversions would help recapture the essence of what I originally enjoyed and got me invested initially - Hollywood and the harem.

Writing quality is above average for WN, although there are some grammar issues it's not too distracting. Story is quite slow paced, that's not a bad thing, but just something to be aware of. The reason for the 3/5 is the protagonist. I just can't find him likeable or relatable at all, I think he must have ran a prank channel before he was reincarnated. His behaviour has already had tragic consequences, with his servant getting beaten and repped, and he continues with stuff like putting his finger in his aas and smearing it on another guy's face... Yeah it's meant to be comedy, but it's just too juvenile. It's a shame, because if it weren't for his attitude, I'm sure I'd enjoy it, but as is, I just can't.

If you're a fan of degenerate wish fulfilment then this is a great read. Grammar is perfect, lemons are good and tied in nicely with the plot. It's nothing ground-breaking but it serves it's niche/genre perfectly.