I've read slow burns but this is the slowest. We constantly hear the bad thoughts emotions and misunderstandings. When i pay to open the next chapter to just get more of the same, I ask if I want to keep going or just read a new book. I just want you to know what it's like to read only struggle and bad thoughts. When i see how many chapters are left and how far I've gotten with only so much progress it seems daunting.
It's lava. Larva are like maggots and such.
" Come here" He demanded and I walked towards him. We stood toe to toe and then he asked " Why do you smell so much like the mountain larva? "
BLOODROSE: THE VAMPIRE LORDS' MATE
LGBT+ · Anna_Baibe
I like the wording here. Very well written. "The night stretches on like a fragile thread..."
There's something bittersweet about it all, a slow-burning ache beneath the comfort of his warmth. The night stretches on like a fragile thread, and I cling to it, refusing to let go.
Fallen General's Omega (BL)
LGBT+ · Sofie_Vert01
This is not important but if "as" is there it should be usual instead of usually. I usually ignore typos. As usual, I continue to ignore typos .
This left the five of us to enjoy dinner. Mateo, Zoe, Luca, Ash, and I. Zeiroi and Treva ate in the kitchen with Maria and staff, as usually, and Sergio didn't come. Tessa sent food to Sergio's villa before she went with Vito to the town to celebrate with everyone else.
The Supreme Alpha
Fantasy · RedSonia
So far the story is well written. It has a nice pace and likable characters.
Really good last paragraph. Well written.
I've noticed you put the disclaimer for piracy in the middle and at the end of the chapter. The chapters cost according to the length of the chapter. These chapters now take 15 coins or 2 fast passes to read. Does the warning in the middle add to the word count and making it costly to read? I have to get a voucher to bring the cost down or I chose another book to read. Just wondering.
Aw. For a second I thought they made a little pack and could mind link each other.
This has been such a cute story. Just sappy enough to keep me sighing.
I just read 2 chapters of just purely made up of inner turmoil. This story needs to move. It's getting expensive with not much forward momentum.
Sleeping With The CEO
Urban · cai_hong