So I find it very weird how the author keeps making Hayden have to wear girly clothes when he’s not into it. It’s very disturbing. Also, I’m in the 50s for the chapters and nothing really seems to be happening. Don’t think this is worth reading anymore. Too weird
So this doesn’t seem ok. Forcing someone to dress up a certain way just for your entertainment is never ok. And making them have to wear anything that is not what they would have chosen for themselves for the rest of the time together is just terrible. I would’ve just either torn off the clothes anyway or just left without them.
My mom simply gives me a menacing eye smile while my Aunt replies. "Oh dear! We might have forgotten your shirt and pants at the boutique and the only thing we have here are ladies clothes and lingerie." Aunt Candy says with a similar threatening smile, her eyes half closed.
Becoming the Luna (bl)
LGBT+ · Aryna_Stan
So this contradicts from the early chapters when they were still in the barracks. Rafe and Jesse commented on Jackson’s fighting saying it was raw or savage or something like that. But this chapter, he’s saying he’s had extensive training since his early childhood.
“Just every morning,” Jackson murmurs, his face distant as he remembers, “we’d troop out of the bunkhouse and get to work – running, learning to fight, sparring with each other.” He shrugs. “It wasn’t so bad. As we got older, the guys who weren’t as good at it – they stopped coming to practice and I’d see them out in the fields and stuff, or training for a new job. But, I mean, I was…good at it. So. I just kept going.”
The Hidden Princess At All-Boys Alpha Academy
Urban · Caroline Above Story
So the story seems like it’s interesting. But the grammar, or maybe sentence structure, is very difficult to understand. It’s kinda all over the place.
Soooo the mom doesn’t notice that Noah has bruises and cuts from getting beat up? Yea this story isn’t very well thought out.
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Can't see but feel
Teen · Laiba
Ok so I started this novel after it was completed. So I just gave a 5 star rating for that. Anyways, the story seems ok? It’s kinda hard to follow with the sentence structures and grammar. Some, or rather most, of the chapters are not well structured. I’m finding it hard to keep up with what is happening and staying interested. I think this story would have been great if it was written a little better. Sorry for the harsh review. I did try sticking with the story. I made it to chapter 40-something. But I have to call it quits. Hopefully, some writing revisal can be done.
Is his dad a pedophile?!
''Yeah, whatever dad.'' Kaiden knew Zev was endowed with the looks along with the muscles but it sounded odd just now with how his dad referred to him as 'pretty.'
TO LOVE HIM!
LGBT+ · Flaming_ash
So the mom and sister ain’t gonna say anything about Blue having no glasses and a swollen eye? Umm okay then...
Haha fell down some stairs!
Though after they came back Irvin was in a rage and he argued with everyone around. He heard that Irvin fought with his father in the office and the fight might have extended to physically punching each other but he knew that wasn’t true. Though he did see a bruise on Edmond’s face, he chose to ignore it thinking it was because he fell down some stairs or whatever.
The Creature Inside Me
LGBT+ · Laiba
Arnold sounds like he’s going on a power trip. And he’s unnecessarily taking his anger out on Alice.
The Rise Of A Porter
Fantasy · AkshatArpit