Good story and also good start and development is decent and smooth. I wish you all the best in the future with your book dear author. keep on writing
Just to fillthe requirement of 10 reviews. For those who care: I voted Writing Quality 4, stability of updates 5, Story development 4, character design 3 and world background 4. I'm not sure whether the first half of the novel to this date dare too fast-paced. Will just rely on possible future readers here.
The first chapters give a promising and thrilling outview and can easily make readers want to read more. The writing style is descriptive and fine and it's a worth to read if you like crime solving
Actually that will be explained. .. .the next chapter iirc. Or the the after that
Reading the story really consumes your time without you realizing how much time you already read it. 3 Chapters passed by as if they were nothing because the flow of the story is workd out very well. For the character, i like Red so far and it sounds like she's a young, maybe a bit naive but pure and kind woman who gets dragged into more that she can understand with her simplicity of life.
This world is just.......yeah.... really makes feeling sorry for the MC
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Horror · Geminel
Nothing really critical to criticize here. Only think I'd recommend is getting rid of the [Internally]. Up to Chapter 3 I haven't seen a reason at least why it wouldn't be possible to just go with ' ' as thoughts. The story is somewhat catchy because it has it's own, funny charm. Other than that: 1. Poor Lucas 2. Even more poor lucas 3. It reminds me a bit of Erased. But instead of traveling back in time to avoid something bad that happens around him, he dies when he misses the chance to fulfill his good deed.
Yeah..... I definitely don't like her. Overly arrogant person
"Good. Then grovel on the ground." I pointed towards my feet. "If you are an insect, then you should act like an insect."
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Fantasy · Mineva
The first chapter caught me off guard tbh and I didn't understand a thing. But towards the end of the first chapter it finally clicked! The story is interesting and exciting. Writing quality maybe needs some check in terms of grammar but beside that it's fine. Development of character as well as unfolding the world is enjoyabl p.s.: I hate Alagarassi. Seems like an annoying, arrogant woman
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original Little vile Maya
"No one deserves luck more than I do!" For 16-year-old Maya, it is the eighth change of school within the last two years. Because of her problematic nature, no one really got along with her for very long. Each time, her behaviour became worse and worse, until she was finally expelled from school. Her parents, still understanding at first, begin to fail her and don't know what to do. They send Maya to Sedaya High School, a prestigious school, from which they hope that the teachers will get along with Maya and also educate her correctly. But is everything really going the way Maya's parents want? Already on her first day, she causes problems and influences those around her. How far will her hidden aggressive behavior take her? Small warning here: I make use of domestic violence, sexual abuses, bullying, suicide and other critical topics. If you by any chance are a person with background in these, please consider whether you refrain from reading this or seek support while reading.5 Chs 0 Collections
Hello people reading this! Let me start this review by saying that I had read the first work of the author and can say that this one is an improvement. It contains Vampires, Werewolves and more subjects that are interesting, but the multiple POVs aren't for everyone and can be challenging to follow. Still, this seems like an interesting story to follow and looking forward to read more.
Darien's Legacy
Fantasy · TheShingPen