trayad70

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trayad70
7 months ago
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This book has a great storyline and interesting characters. At first I wasnt’t for the trupple, but it grew on me. What hasn’t grown on me is the amount of wasted words the author utilizes in their efforts of creating visual descriptions of the scenery and characters. Literally, in most chapters, the 1st few pages are repetitive descriptions of the ‘lush estate’ or ‘beauty of the mls. If they have to provide a detailed reminder every chapter of the aesthetic prowess of the characters & backdrop, do it in 1-2 paragraphs per chapter rather than repeating yourself multiple times wasting multiple pages of each chapter. A proofreader is definitely needed.

trayad70
trayad70
7 months ago
Commented

The author literally described and repeated the same scenerio 5 different times in not so different 5 different ways… this book has a good storyline but needs a serious edit.

Decades of silence and numbness seemed to unravel in the face of this near lifeless body.

The Ger's Contract Marriage [BL]

The Ger's Contract Marriage [BL]

LGBT+ · Ellie_Ethereal

trayad70
trayad70
7 months ago
Commented

Omg… how many times are their hair, eyes & aura going to be described??? We got a pretty good grasp of that early, early on in the book.

As Xu Feng sat mostly admiring Xuan Yang's scholarly aura, he couldn't help but marvel at the man's appearance. Xuan Yang had a certain air of refinement about him, with his sleek, black hair neatly tied back and his dark eyes scanning the pages of the book in front of him. 

The Ger's Contract Marriage [BL]

The Ger's Contract Marriage [BL]

LGBT+ · Ellie_Ethereal

trayad70
trayad70
1 years ago
Commented

They are doing way too much. This is dumb👎

trayad70
trayad70
1 years ago
Commented

Agreed…. This does not make sense!

"I'll do whatever it takes to be with you."

The King’s Pet

The King’s Pet

LGBT+ · RoseNesha

trayad70
trayad70
1 years ago
Commented

One of the BEST stories I’ve read since becoming BLNovel fan! Fantastic! No o guess I’l read your next novel!

trayad70
trayad70
1 years ago
Commented

I’m getting a little suspicious Kwang. He seems to know way too much about everyone 🤔🤫🫣

trayad70
trayad70
trayad70
1 years ago
Commented

Han Han such a sly butth@@@ but u gotta luv him!😆

'Checkmate,' said Zi Han internally.

The Assassin's Enemy Lover

The Assassin's Enemy Lover

LGBT+ · Andru_9788

trayad70
trayad70
1 years ago
Commented

Why are the privelage chapters so expensive?