ArashiDragon

ArashiDragon

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2020-09-04 Joined United States
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ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
5 months ago
Posted

Loved the story. It was a little slow at first, but then it picked up. There were a few slow spots, but it was more like taking a break, building suspense, before jumping back in. My only regret is that I wish there were 1 or 2 more chapters to the epilogue. not to say it wasn't good, but I felt that a little more could have been shown about how much Kai had changed. I wouldn't mind a short story that explains a little of Kai's new life and that of his family and friends.

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Replied to Dweia

Just thought I'd update you, after I completed today's login goals, I was able to unlock more chapters... 4 of the 5.

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Replied to Dweia

I'm on 336, I can see up to 341, but 337 and on is behind privilege lock.

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Commented

Any update for those of us stuck on chapter 336, to get the last 5 chapters?

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Replied to Falcon_X

Possibly edited after I commented...

"Everyone, pick up your weapons." Leo said, drawing his blade. "Your friends and families might be dead but you still live, and the enemy still lives. You want revenge right? Well ,now is your chance."

My Vampire System

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Replied to Daniel_Folks

"...you still alive..." is not correct either way... Either "you are still..." Or "you're still..."

"Everyone, pick up your weapons." Leo said, drawing his blade. "Your friends and families might be dead but you still live, and the enemy still lives. You want revenge right? Well ,now is your chance."

My Vampire System

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Commented

"...does to a couple..."

That's when they saw it, the vampires, were only down two a couple along with Edward and Leo a little behind them. While the bloodsuckers still had half their size left. Nearly all the vampires were dead.

My Vampire System

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Commented

"...but you're still alive."

"Everyone, pick up your weapons." Leo said, drawing his blade. "Your friends and families might be dead but you still live, and the enemy still lives. You want revenge right? Well ,now is your chance."

My Vampire System

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Commented

Error: "...changed the outcome of this war."

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The Soul Keeper

The Soul Keeper

Games · Dweia

ArashiDragon
ArashiDragon
3 years ago
Commented

"I ruched over..." Should be 'I rushed over...'

"Fetheion?" I called the Divine's name, only to be met with more silence. "Mona, Asher?" I asked, my voice getting louder with each name. "Lucius? Laura?" I first checked the library, only to find it empty. I ruched over to the bedrooms and barged in every single one of them. Each time, it was empty.

The Soul Keeper

The Soul Keeper

Games · Dweia