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There's a high chance I'm going to insult you... Another big chance is I'm gonna write an essay to you on why I hate you and your ideals.

2020-08-06 Joined United States

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Replied to SkyNeves

You misspelled “Your” and called me ”Mentally Oppressive” you’re the type of idiot who reads the thing

Jiraiya quickly went into his apartment while Tsunade was still stunned, but after he closed his door, she blushed furiously as she went home while calling Jiraiya all sorts of names.

Naruto: The Strongest Senju

Naruto: The Strongest Senju

Anime & Comics · Kingkillerdj2023

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Replied to BlueCactusE

No, but your body burns fat while asleep to continue functions, so either she won't be able to sleep at all or she'll die in her sleep.

Su Xiaolu fell asleep again, mainly because she felt hungry, but there was definitely nothing to eat at this time. She decided that she should sleep, as she would not be hungry in her sleep.

Transmigrated As A Delicate Bundle Of Luck For A Farming Family

Transmigrated As A Delicate Bundle Of Luck For A Farming Family

History · Skin White As Snow

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Replied to Zailo95

Yeah, I swear half of my moments are forgetting have the rest the other half of my achievement.

He wore a blue tracksuit with earphones on as he looked at the humongous gate, his thoughts were 'wow, how rich is this school, and why are they wasting money like this?' His heart ached as he remembered they were about 7 of such miniature cities, he truly was saddened by it.

MHA: The Lazy Hero

MHA: The Lazy Hero

Anime & Comics · ImAGhost

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I'm not sure how you Fraudkuna fans are coping after the amount of Ls, he's been taking recently, all you on some good copium

Honoured One of Young Justice

Honoured One of Young Justice

Anime & Comics · Honoured_Writer

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Replied to Kamon772

Of course, so here is my response and reply’s: First I am aware of Cruz being just a random male character, by controlling I meant Ragni immediately forcing them to act in ways they normally wouldn’t. I have read each chapter that was free beside the two unlock ones that are strewn in between(which I fast passed.) Second, I would suggest the app or website grammarly, the free version is great and the paid is extra. Third, I was talking about the scene/chapter after Ragni gets out of the hole, you had Ragni’s pov, the twins, and the attacker. It comes across more repetetively when you space them across different chapters. Lastly, what I mean by “the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue” is that when you went to switch pov’s you didn’t give us a clear warning, it was also never communicated that were multiple Leads. Something like changing i between them during the traveling in the wild, it would be easier to ease the leads together and we wouldn’t be thrown into a different setting in the blink of an eye. The main issue of the multiple leads is that while it’s cool to have multiple, a good amount was purely the twins and ragni, time passed, training with Ragni, stopping in town, finding a tattoo on Ragni. So if you were reading this, what you would see is a bunch of chapters being purely about the 3 present leads and then out of nowhere a day passes and we have new leads for some reason and the twins are gone for awhile. There was no clear knowledge of the multiple leads or pov switches and it just seemed thrown together. The multiple leads and the multiple perspective viewpoints don’t have a warning or any indicator. A good example would be:[attacker] POV. You put that in the same chapter of the other pov and then we have clear knowledge that there’s a switch in pov’s

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Replied to Simple_Russian_Boi

I would call it more of a far off comparison, I don’t mean for it to be 1:1 but more to guide you to the scope of my point. You say that you’re trying to write about the experience of someone thrown into a monsters body but you basically made him get rid of it day 1 in hogwarts. I don’t mean this to be rude but you do understand you can’t view the experience of a dog if they get memory wiped and then become invisible. This is what I mean, you wanted in your words to view the experiences of an unfortunate man forced into another world with the body of a monster, nice idea! But you set his goal to be invisible and completely become a normal guy in the world. That doesn’t sound like the experience of a guy turned into a monster and having to navigate life, it just sounds like a guy getting sent to the world as a nonhuman, then hiding away until he becomes a human again. You might find your world perfect but the words you’ve said completel go the opposite way. The way you see it is of a guy’s experience as a monster but others see it as a guy hiding and then becoming a human again to finish off the story. Not to mention you messed up the actual enderman rage part, the whole meaning of enderman’ stage is to kill whoever has seen it, but he somehow gets calmed down after he killed an entire village of spiders brutally. Anyways, I don’t mean anything rude by this but this story is just his journey to becoming human again. Since I’m here I’ll tell you the 3 category’s for bad additions to novels(not saying yours is bad just had a bad addition): The returning to being a human category, the going back to earth category, and the harem category.

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