paintedaisys

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2020-06-05 Joined Global
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paintedaisys
paintedaisys
1 years ago
Replied to Auroraaa

I appreciate the response and have read through it, however I don’t think you understand that even if you yourself were fat at one point in your life, it doesn’t excuse your fatphobia. Starting from chapter 4, you begin to make references to the FL’s body and how big and fat it is, which is okay, but it’s clear her body is being associated to fatness in a negative portrayal. Even if she has a health condition, that doesn’t excuse the rude language and comments about her body. Your readers can see this and feel hurt, and think about the message you’re pushing to your audience. Impact > intention. Connotating a fat body to an elephant, is rooted in fat phobia. Whether you’re being obtuse and choosing to ignore this or not, I suggest looking into your word choice. You also liked a comment saying “I see we have some unhealthy lifestyle enAblers here!” Why is it always fatness associated with unhealthy lifestyles? If as you said, the FL has a health condition making her fat then there doesn’t need to be unnecessary comments about her lifestyle being unhealthy, because if it’s a condition then she doesn’t have a choice or control over her weight. So you liking that comment, highlights your true intentions. I’m not saying all this to attack you or as a gotcha thing, but genuinely educate yourself. Furthermore, you used the r-slur (look it up if you’re unsure about the meaning and history), in chapter 4 of your novel. I suggest you educate yourself upon the meaning of the word and why the context you used it in is unnecessary, fictional book or not. And I understand the reality of the world and the stigma and fatphobia in society. But pushing it into fictional novels is bizarre to me because you as an author can write and chose to include so many better ideas, straying away from the problems of reality. Yet you didn’t. And that’s your choice I guess. Nevertheless, I hope you take my advice and edit the book again, even if you wrote it at 19. Start looking into what message your book is pushing, even if you didn’t mean to fatshane. Again, impact > intention.

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
1 years ago
Posted

Don’t bother reading if you’re looking for a book with good quality writing and language style, cause this is not it. Could barely get past the first few chapters due to the random dropping of the “r slur” and fatphobic rhetoric and the author liking comments insinuating fatness is associated with unhealthily lifestyles. The dehumanizing language such as “elephant” and every single comment about the fl’s body was annoying to the point where I was rolling my eyes. Not really surprised though cause all novels on this app seem to run along the narrative of skinny pale white skinned women who are oh so beautiful and could never be fat!! Words of advice for the author, look into your internalized fatphobia and what message you’re intentionally or unintentionally pushing to your readers. Especially younger audiences where they can feel hurt by such comments about body types and how you associate fatness as a bad thing. Do better.

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
1 years ago
Replied to S_43

That doesn’t change the fact that this is fatshaming language and rhetoric though. Saying “baby elephant”, if a fat person were to read this statement, it’s clear the author is being mean and offensive, resorting to dehumanizing animalistic language. Do better author, losing hope for this story.

Although getting fat or chubby was not something bad or uncommon, but she still wondered just how in the world she resembled a baby elephant at the tender age of 21 years.

Married to his secret crush

Married to his secret crush

Urban · Auroraaa

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
3 years ago
Commented

So r*pe or death essentially?? These webnovel plots are actual garbage.

Emmelyn was rendered speechless. So, she basically didn't have a choice. It was either her head or her womb.

The Cursed Prince

The Cursed Prince

Fantasy · Missrealitybites

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
3 years ago
Commented

ObSiDiAn

At this moment, Lin Xiaofei felt someone's eyes were staring at her and looked up, and made eye contact with the other person's dark obsidian eyes.

The Birth of a Villainess

The Birth of a Villainess

History · Poisonlily

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
3 years ago
Commented

Bro wtf😭😭 Author tf r u writing, pls this whole paragraph weird. Im boutta drop this story if u keep coninuing to call the adoptive brother weird things. I had high hopes too. Pls edit this. Like no one wants to read this paragraph. Keep the suggestive comments towards the male leads and not the brother. Weird asf. You better change this whole chapter and the last☠️

Serena continued observing the hot specimen in front of her. If only he is not her adoptive brother with a golden thigh she can always hug, no doubt that he will be on top of the list of her prospective boyfriends. Come to think of it, they are not really related by blood, unless you count the teeny weeny part of them being distant relatives. Also, they were never close as siblings, add to it the fact that she is a transmigrator who do not have any sisterly love for him. Also, incest so long as there's no real blood relation is one of her fantasies after reading the novel 'beware of the brothers'. However, if she decided to pursue that path, it will be game over for her. It's either marriage automatically, or... she doesn't even want to think of other results. She also think that she can always leave this route for last. It is said in the novel that Leonard will take responsibility for her no matter what.

Making the second male lead fall in love with me, the villainess

Making the second male lead fall in love with me, the villainess

History · champilyn

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
3 years ago
Commented

Bro why u gotta say “sexy.” Thats weird asf esp cause hes ur brother😟 #sus

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
4 years ago
Commented

gottem

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The young man spoke in a cold and unhurried tone, but his voice was remarkably pleasant. "Pay me back with your flesh? My apologies, but pork isn't worth much this year."

The Heir is Here: Quiet Down, School Prince!

The Heir is Here: Quiet Down, School Prince!

Teen · An Xiangnuan

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
4 years ago
Commented

Y’all i think the author wrote 2D intentionally to imply that her half-sister is “fake”(¿).

Xiaolei who was silent all this time was also speechless. She couldn't believe that even her sister Meili couldn't catch his attention. Was he not into stunning women who looked innocent with a kind heart? But he also didn't even look at the sophisticatedly beautiful but scheming and evil girl, Luo Suyin. He didn't want the protagonist nor the antagonist, so what exactly was he looking for? Maybe he didn't want 2D girls?

I Hate You, Devil!

I Hate You, Devil!

Urban · KazzenlX

paintedaisys
paintedaisys
4 years ago
Replied to Azalea_Myst

Oop meant to write physiotherapist not physiologist,,

The drive to the Physiatrist only took ten minutes. Qin Mei was very happy because she was already borderline late for work. They got lucky and hit all green lights on the way over. They pulled up in front of a full windowed storefront. But you were not able to see inside due to all the Venetian blinds being drawn closed.

Young Miss Strike Back!

Young Miss Strike Back!

Urban · invayne