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Nuyal gave Bangles an appraising look and said, "I'd agree with his evaluation, but there are planets out there that make this place look like a vacation, so don't get too excited."
Majin's Journey
Anime & Comics · Yoesph
Yeah just had a busy week at work!
Thanks for the feedback! I'll admit as I put in the description I don't have a concrete plan in mind for the story progression, but you make a great point honestly. Yardrat probably would be a more beneficial planet for him to go to if he knew where it was, and the nerfing is something done intentionally. my idea was the only real difference start wise between him and Buu is that he one, has his memories, and two was not born with overwhelming power. So he will reach Buu levels and beyond eventually, I just wanted it to be more of a journey. Hope you keep reading and that you continue to leave feedback!
The best way to improve is by reading other's work and trying to take things you enjoy. I would also say plenty of authors have YouTube videos with writing tips and advice. Brandon Sanderson stands out with some great videos. Also, just practice, really. Even if you think it's bad, get words written and go from there.
Haha, well, he is a Majin physically, but he originally wasn't before he transmigrated. Plus, I view Buu's candy obsession as more of a personal quirk vs. a trait of his race.
Thanks, I really appreciate the sentiment!
Yeah, that's fair. Been busy with work and college, so I haven't had much time or energy to dedicate to this. I'm hoping to fall into a better schedule this time. Thanks for reading.
Thank you! I'm excited to get out of this introduction arc and get into the proper meat of the story.
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original Majin's Journey
Waking up in the middle of space with no memories and a strange body will throw anybody for a loop, especially if you happen to be in the world of DBZ. -- It's my first ever story, and I don't have a solid plan on where to take it or how the characterization will go. It will be a slower story and is mostly just for my own practice, but if I start developing something I enjoy, I will plan things more extensively. Please leave any and all feedback! Image credit: KevMD11 on Deviant Art9 Chs 198 Collections
Yeah exactly! Just being a Majin is enough of a gold finger for Kai to go far.
Majin's Journey
Anime & Comics · Yoesph