okay she is schizophrenic
"Good." He said, his eyes softening a little. "As you just saw, we aren't exactly human. Rather we are half-demons. Specifically we are Satan's descendants."
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what?????
Black horns grew from his head and his eyes started glowing purple, the purple light swirling around his black iris. His gray colored eyes were gone completely. Melina turned to look at her brothers and saw they had turned as well.
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Nervously, she took it, looking at her father. Things were getting quite confusing for her. The family secret isn't about us being in a cult, is it? Melina thought. I know money makes people do weird things but please…
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Wait what noble, Am i still a peasant??
It's like sitting at a noble's table, Melina thought as she turned away to stare down at the gold fork in her hand. The cutlery was all gold with a peacock engraved into it.
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roasted
"It is. Thank you." Melina replied, looking up from her plate of roast chicken and vegetables.
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I keep forgetting she is just 16.
The word 'father' was still a little weird for her to say, especially when referring to James Rana. She had spent ten years calling someone else 'father' so it was a little hard for Melina.
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hugs are distinct, am I too lonely to know that??
The embrace felt weirdly familiar like she had hugged this person before. Many times. She closed her eyes, hugging Kai back and feeling and emotion she never knew she was missing. Comfort.
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Yep the family business
"It's best if father explains that but it's because of the family business."
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come you knew it, it was going to happen
When Melina's cries began to subside, Jason turned to look at her again. He pulled her chin up and wiped her tears gently with his other hand. "I'm sorry about what happened. No one expected it to happen…"
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Writing Quality - Great third pov. Either way, I am a sucker for 3rd pov. There is feeling a of darkness and mystery as we see the journey of Mc. Story Development It is stable I felt it was slow during the initial first chapter but who doesn't live seeing Mc in pain and feeling the misery of losing her parents? Oh! you guys don't. Weird 😕.Character Design: My fav thing about this novel is that Mc is great She doesn't just get used to the family secret or any of her new family bs. She goes with the flow but can feel she just doesn't magically forget the people who took care of her for 10 years.Updating Stability: You are doing great work author. Quality over Quantity.World background: Full of mystery Satanic stuff. The author is just great at writing dark themes. Would love to see the school arc
The Godfather's Hidden Daughter
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