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Cough cough, Rin is 17, Not 14/15, That's a bit too much of a difference, In my opinion, Kind of puts the story in a different context if that's her age. You can just ignore this comment if you want to, I shall certainly be ignoring your stated age for her, And be changing it to her Canon one in my mind. (Sakura is 16 and Illyasviel is 18 in Canon, by the way)

Yeah, You're right, Besides you are like 10 chapters ahead on your Patreon right? It might have helped if I had commented on them when they came out there, Instead of now, But oh well, That's just how things are sometimes, Anyways I enjoyed writing these comments, Despite me barely remembering the Fate Animes, I surprisingly remember a lot of trivia about the Fateverse, It's funny how memory works sometimes.

Once again a correction, Saber is stuck in a materials state, (She was also stuck in a material state in Fate/Zero) Due to her technically not dying, she made an agreement with the counterforce before she died, So she could seek The Grail to make her wish come true, (That she would never draw the sword Caliburn) So she's currently in a state between life and death, Or something like that. And once again you can quite easily search this up on the TYPE-MOON Wiki.

I have a few Corrections, First and Foremost, the one who's targeting the school is Medusa AKA Rider, who's controlled by Shinji Matou, not Caster, Caster took over Ryuudou Temple and has practically nothing to do with the school other than her Master. Secondly, Between Rin summoning her Servant and Shirou summoning his, There is approximately 1 and 1/2 to 2 days between them, After summoning Archer, Rin will have a conversation with archer before going to sleep, She would wake up the next day, And go search Fuyuki in hopes of potentially finding signs of other Servants, But she would not find anything, She would go home and sleep, Then wake up the next day, Go to school, Only to find a Bounded Field around her school, She would spend the day secretly searching the school, But also attending it to avoid suspicion, She would only take action at Evening/Night, Where she would encounter Lancer, And fight and blah blah blah, I don't think I need to explain the rest, Only that Shirou would summon his Servant after this. Thirdly, Shirou uses his nerves not his veins as Pseudo Magic Circuits. And just some advice, you can look most of this up on the TYPE-MOON Wiki very easily, it is actually a great Wiki, and thank you for the chapter, Well that's it, I don't have more to say.

oh, okay? I'm just not very familiar with CYOA, so I don't know what's possible and not. (and I'm not quite sure if you are responding to my comment or the original? if not just ignore this comment)

I think he just triggered, (killing the woman) we might just not have gotten to that part yet, after all I'm pretty sure that people that have triggered don't show the powers immediately, (at least not all of them) though I could be wrong about that, I haven't read the original, just some FanFictions.

With what? Kieu being stupid for no apparent reason? Yes, that we should drop the novel? No, I personally will continue reading in hopes it gets better, it hasn't quite gotten to the level of being completely hopeless, though it's still close. (if the Author doesn't give a proper reason why Kieu isn't going to the government, I will most likely drop)

Kieu is being kind of stupid right now, and I can't really understand why, I usually can understand why your other main characters are being stupid, but here I just can't, the only reason I can think of, why Kieu isn't just going to the authorities (and I'm not talking about the PRT, I'm talking about the actual government) is he has some kind of mental block against it? but that's a weak excuse. (despite being in a kid's body, his mind is that of a grown adult) and Now this is why I believe he can go to the authorities without suffering much of, if any, consequences for what he's done. Firstly: from everyone else point of view he's a 13-year-old child. Secondly: he did not do it willingly, he was forced to do it. (though that's somewhat a weak excuse, he still killed someone) Thirdly: a legitimate villain cape (who's famous for being a psychopath) was threatening him. (not directly, but still indirectly) Fourthly: the authorities was already worried about him, (due to the Uber and Leet incident) so they have partial responsibility for what happened. (they did not put him into Witness Protection when they should have) Fifthly: he has his correspondence with Canary on PHO (to prove he was not going with the ABB willingly)