Fredo_pepito

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Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
6 months ago
Posted

I don't know why this is highly rated, the romance is crap for three reasons. The first the FML is boring, her personnality, a cold beauty is garbage, she is so boring that each time the author feel the need to emphasized how much of a peerless beauty she is, the only thing she has. The second reason, the author want to make a useful FML not a pretty doll like other novel still MC is strong and smart so he is trying to make her stronger and smarter than MC but as the author has 0 idea on how to do it so he nerf MC by making him super dumb and trying to make FML smart. Last reason, everyone is acting like MC and FML love each other and they should be together, they were 0 interaction toward love. MC is acting the same with everyone and suddenly boom he must love her no choice man this is "fated", sure is if everyone is pushing it for no reason. The biggest plothole of this story is the fact that modern weapon don't work against dream creature. The author litterally write modern weapon don't work and nobody know why. Ok so if modern weapon don't work then why dropping a pillar, which mean rock, can damage a fallen devil but bullet deal 0 damage? Why MC say he can shrug off bullet when another ascended got instant kill by a ballista? A standard bullet has a higher penetration power and speed than a bolt from a ballista, the only advantage the bolt have over the bullet is the mass. In this case the ascended should have died by crushing not by a hole in his body. Moreover, they have higher tech meaning more powerful weapon and they can't craft an effective modern weapon, sure thing bro must swing that odachi so cool yeah yeah At this point, humanity is losing should be impossible if not for the stupid plothole. I only read upto ch817 i stopped after author stupid explanation even if the romance was crap i could still skip it. Last thing, powerful people try to kill FML but they fail before she awakened because they couldn't do it freely. Sure they can control information and have a stronger force but they can't kill a normal little girl, author should really learn what people of power can truly do. Trying to make FML with a badass/sob backstory and end up writing a joke.

Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
1 years ago
Posted

i read 240 chapters so far even if it show C75. The world building and power system is good and it is well written. The story isn't progressing at all because the author keep pressing with a sh*t ton of useless "character developpement". MC whine non stop while he is suppose to be 40+, i could relate if i was ten. For whatever reason, author believe that MC go throught a massive pain in his life so he contain a deep darkness within him. If it play no part in the story then idc but it does so this "darkness" or "abyss" is a joke because what MC go throught is common where i'm from and they aren't edgelord everywhere. Solus shouldn't have been part of the story, first he litterally found a overpower artefact after a random stroll in the forest, i sure don't expect to find a million while i stroll. Second, her main purpose is to push forward MC "character developpement" so it is obviously clumsy. Last, author write a "character developpement" for 5 chapter then 10 chapter later everything that it wrote for 5 chapter is put in the trash because NEW "character developpement " yay, ngl if the author do stun like this it's no wonder he manage to write so many chapter.

Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
1 years ago
Posted

So far i'm at CH99. The author's writing improves as the novel progresses, which is really nice. At first, MC's blood was boiling so much that you wondered if he was the cause of global warming, then it calmed down as the author found new ways to express himself. The plot is good, there are a few twists that make you want to read more, a nice feeling I admit. The world building is well done, I recommend other authors to read it if they plan to write something similar. Still, the pacing, in my eyes, should be reviewed. First, there are too many chapters about the MC and other characters' thoughts. I don't want to read the character's thoughts every 3 chapters. It can even happen in midst of action. Second, the repetition, there is one chapter where the first half is the second half, the wording was slightly different. There is a shit ton of repetition instead of having to read that we could have input on MC plan or goal. I have no idea what the MC's plan is because every time something happens the MC says some bs like "as expected" or "so it begin". I don't mind not knowing the whole MC plan, but we don't even know the end goal. Also, the MC is supposed to learn from his mistakes, but he keeps screwing up his plan because some twist happens and says some other bs like "omg it's different from the plot". MC end goal is to be happy but how exactly does he plan to achieve it ?Strengh is the best answer to protect his happiness why does it take so few actions to improve himself? His friendship with other characters is a bit bland. In my eyes, it's like "hey, let's be friends" + time skip and voila, we have a friendship. If there is romance, will it be the same? "Let's date" + time skip of 10 years and then they get married and have a kid. The building of the friendship shouldn't have been skipped, because now we don't see the depth of their relationship. Also, a couple of chapters about the character's thoughts appear because the building was skipped and the building is done through thought, it's clumsy. I don't know if I'll continue reading it because of the pacing. I recommend to read at least the first volume. Also for the author, any prologue in my eyes is useless and full of spoilers.

Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
1 years ago
Commented

Thank you ! Love your work

Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
2 years ago
Posted

Way better work than some crap you can find in the ranking. The story is slow and has a focus on comedy so sometime it break the flow of story but its still fine. The only downside is the slow update

Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
2 years ago
Commented

really love your work, waiting for the next chapter !

Fredo_pepito
Fredo_pepito
2 years ago
Commented

why he doesn't have 2 stygma if there is 2 souls within his body????

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Fredo_pepito
2 years ago
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