Ray_Dark

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Ray_Dark
4 years ago
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nice and thrilling roman with horror, it's thrilling to at author have good potential, I think she can do a far better job just keep up the good work.

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Ray_Dark
4 years ago
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it's a good story the horror and thrilled in the first paragraph, jut little grammar mistakes like in the first line "I hated the color red because it was a color that hunters my dreams" this is going in the past tense like she hates red color in the past, not in the present, it should be more like this. "I hate red because it's a color that hunters my dreams" and the other line should be like this "then my eyes drifters around I found my best friend Tara's body nailed on the wall or rather what left of her"

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The DEVIL'S darling

The DEVIL'S darling

Fantasy · Misumi

Ray_Dark
Ray_Dark
4 years ago
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Intrusting, Guy name Leo reincarnate in another world with wings after his death, good story people should read it, not the best but it's good, Author is immature but has potential in time I think he can grow and write even better.

  • Dark Age original

    Dark Age

    Action ACTION ADVENTURE COMEDY

    4.85

    The story takes place in the interstellar universe, where everyone born with a tag on them(S, A, B, C,) which created by the Godlike Emperor who rules 3/4 of the universe from Millenniums. The Tags gives the higher tags complete domain over those tags, this age knows as Dark Age. The tale is about a young boy named Atlas, who woke up on an unknown planet and found everyone on the planet dead. He is a boy born without a tag on him known as "untagged". The untagged is the individual how possed the strength or talent to rival the Emperor and conceded as the symbol of terror and destruction. The story starts when the boy escapes from a slave dealer to find his mother and thus the tale of an Untagged boy, who brings an end to the Dark Age begging.

    2 Chs 290 Collections

  • samsara original

    samsara

    Fantasy ACTION ADVENTURE REINCARNATION COMEDY

    Krahn the second strongest legendary Hero of, who born with armor, or rather his skin was his armor itself, his body cannot be destroyed or harmed, he never gets hurts or feels pain in his entire life. But he always wants to become the strongest, to defeat the number one hero Alvin. He fought in Great war against Alvin and for some reason, he skinned his armor and The battle was ecip and long fought and in end Krahn finaly died. Now he is been reincarnated in a fantasy world and one of the tripels Son of a Human and High Human couple.

    4 Chs 6 Collections

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