What happened to the grammar in this chapter? I understand the terms, but what's with taking out the dialogues and speaking as if they were scientists?
I finally found something good after searching for a while; the story shows promise and has good development considering it has few chapters without strange time jumps or inconsistencies.
I feel like the plot is being forced.
Honestly, I didn't like the chapter; it was too spontaneous.
Finding a Digimon story is rare, but it's absolutely rare; it's like looking for a needle in a haystack, and finding one that's even remotely acceptable is like finding a needle in a haystack.
This book has been deleted.
For a story with 13 chapters, the development it consistently shows as the chapters progress is good; it's nice to see a story that... The progress feels slow and deliberate, without any sudden jumps between dialogues.
My honest opinion, considering that the world it was in was Dark Souls 3 previously, is that it doesn't fit at all with the current world; the dynamic seems forced, and the MC behaves too normally from my point of view. The plot so far doesn't offer much; it's just a series of jumps between dialogues from one situation to another.
Typical problem with making a strong MC is that it's difficult to carry it off.
The story is very good and all, but the context they give you is that he's in love (supposedly it's a harem story) and decides to flirt with someone after consummating his relationship. Honestly, if the story had continued as it was up to the train station, I would have considered it a simple romance story, but the dynamic was cut short by doing something as sudden as flirting. Without wanting to betray Maki, without further ado...
The story needs a review in terms of dialogue; it seems they speak too formally, using jargon as if they were talking between soldiers and scientists. Aside from that, I think the story It's fine if that changes, it would be good to read it again, but if that's with AI and it doesn't revise and only uploads chapters, because otherwise I don't think it will last long.
Crossover: This Room Has Rules You Can't Refuse
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