Good chapter, keep up the great work!
Thanks for the chapter
''What witch? My mother-in-law?''
Fantasy · jonasjonasjonas
The work has a very good idea. A well summarized but relatively strange synopsis may not please many, so I suggest you take a look at it later. I can't give too much of a review given there isn't much content available at the moment, however. here are some things about the work: The writing is normal/okay and doesn't get in the way, but it could be improved. Grammatical errors are constant and, if possible or necessary, I highly recommend using tools that can help you fix this. Also remember to improve the spacing you use between lines; in some situations it was a bit confusing to understand the descriptions. The idea is cool and can be worked on to improve over time. I'll try to stay here on your journey, and I'll come back later to make further observations about the work. Finally, sorry for the somewhat "superficial" review, and keep up the good work.
Thanks for the chapter.
Smart move, I hope it stays that way.
''Let's start with the first step!'' He said, smiling slightly out of the corner of his mouth. ''Make notes about important things so I don't forget!''
Fantasy · Qu4ttro
*to the one of his new (...)*
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Fantasy · Qu4ttro
Good one, thx by the chapter BTW
I do know a person...
Who would want to admit they'd been transported to an unknown place out of nowhere? Wouldn't that be enough to horrify the average person?
Fantasy · Qu4ttro
So far it's great. Keep up the good work, author.
being rewritten in contest!
Fantasy · okaysuredudee