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Moments 2180
Horribly the whole seperation arc stupidity as a child is just and then hand waving away how anCHOLD soldnand bought stocks is just not worth reading you've ruined your own fic by forcing stupid ideas right out the gate for a horendouslly rough start honestly this fic had ootential but you skip and force too much not worth while to read anymore get more clear and thought out storylines from mobile game adds than the current stiry you've written
Make sure to tell me how the pace of the story is going. Also, keep recommending me more movies or series. Don't forget to read the weird quote of the day in the author's thought.}
Victoria Alexandra Alexia ~ The Multiverse Traveler
Movies · groomable
Yeah think I'm gonna stop reading this fic here Ash's personality just I dunno it get's worse and worse as the fic goes in and he just cimes off as a rude pr*ck rather than anything else at first it was ok sure he was needlessly arrogant and constantly just borish rather than anything but now it's just olain areogance ignorance and rudness lost any and all joy or interest I felt at the start if the fic and the mutliple POV swapping constantly is obnoxious as f*ck like I get you want to the world to feel fleshed out but with so much going on and Ash's personality devolving into utter trash over the past 50-60~ish chapters this fic is just dropping dramatically in quality and interest
ch 163 "We have a Project to finish"
Pokemon: Radical Redux
Anime & Comics · Katsu39
No just this Ash is unreasonably arrogant rude and forceful just overall meh as a MC he's too prideful and ignorant to accept training tips from a former Champion
Professor Oak sighed and sat down on his computer to do some unplanned work, also looking at the notebook he offered Both Gary and Ash, "Are my training techniques that unpopular?"
Pokemon: Radical Redux
Anime & Comics · Katsu39
Personally I would advise you to stop go back and rewrite this fic honestly so far the writing has been forced AF and just feels sloppy genuinely interested in the premise of this fic but the execution is 2/5 at best
I would also like a comment about who the secretary should be.
Victoria Alexandra Alexia ~ The Multiverse Traveler
Movies · groomable
Yeah no problem magically making money yay.... man the planning fir this fic is so sloppy and forced like non of this feels organic or thought out just quick ideas to BS the MC's way to relevamce and a leadership position
During the 1960s, it was quite easy to get an identity if you had money, which I did. After that, I opened an account for the stock market with the help of Katie, who transformed into a gentleman who was also my guardian on paper. I use the short-sell option, which means that when the Dow Jones Industrial Average and S&P 500 drop, I earn. I invested 5000 USD with 50 times the leverage on each of them. I knew they would drop because I had some help from Katie in accessing the 21st century internet. [A/N: I know some things about leveraging might be wrong, but it was the 1960s; who knows how much leverage someone could get?]
Victoria Alexandra Alexia ~ The Multiverse Traveler
Movies · groomable
Horrible idea but sure why not gotta figure out some way to explain abandoning family for 10 years
Yes, kidnapping. I've watched a lot of movies and TV shows in my previous life. So, I thought, why not make it seem like I was kidnapped? After my group has risen to power, Make it seem like this was the group who kidnapped me due to my intellect and powerful body, and I killed the leader and took the leader's place. This would explain my disappearance, and I would be able to solely focus on the company instead of dealing with sewing, marriages, and hiding my identity.
Victoria Alexandra Alexia ~ The Multiverse Traveler
Movies · groomable
No just no reasonable progression not BS that should have the MC dead but plot armor decides nah if you want to focus in quality instead of quantity for chapters don't go for a cheap cope out
I would have experienced many things, and there would be no point in pretending. So, why not let them live their own lives? After all, I've got eternity. [Author-chan: She does have eternity. I mean, come on, just go to the In Time movie and get the time from the banks. It's too easy for her to be immortal.]
Victoria Alexandra Alexia ~ The Multiverse Traveler
Movies · groomable
Huh 10 years being missing yeah another seperation arc centric fic I see why does everyone copy this stupid trope it get's old and boring with how often it's reused and rehashed
So you guys will know what I did to make Alexia go away from the Royal Family for at least ten years.
Victoria Alexandra Alexia ~ The Multiverse Traveler
Movies · groomable
I'm with Alakazam here
[Oh boy, this is going to rot my brain] Alakazam said as he put his hand on his head.
Pokemon: Radical Redux
Anime & Comics · Katsu39
I mean Magma and Aqua are still Continental at lowest and potentially Planetary level threats since ya know controlling Primordial Legendary's that literally shaped the planet is their end goal lore accurate Groudon Kyogre and Rayquaza are areguably only weaker than Giratina Arceus Dialga and Palkia and maybe Zygarde in hierarchy their Primal forms are technically according to lore Planetary lore accurate Pokemon is a world of difference with the anime and games
From behind the screen, Ash smiled, "Simple really, I want you to give me everything you know about Team Galactic."
Pokemon: Radical Redux
Anime & Comics · Katsu39
I don't blame them the addiction to Gwent of all things is just... man I don't know this fic showed promise starting out but now between the dialogue being stiff and needlessly exaggerated it's just ya know feels awkward and rough to read
He shot a glance at those who seemed unimpressed by the announcement, adopting a slightly indignant tone as he continued:
Witcher: The Half Elf
Book&Literature · LIl_wretch
Is it just me or is the dialogue stiff and just over exaggerated constantly it's getting kinda obnoxious
"That was quite the splendid game, Mr. Wayne. The deck I meticulously assembled after investing a considerable sum actually lost to your common cards that can be found anywhere. For me, it was a valuable competition. It taught me to be humble, cautious, and not to underestimate anyone. As per our bets, these three hundred Orens are yours."
Witcher: The Half Elf
Book&Literature · LIl_wretch
Yeah think I'm gonna drop the fic here been holding out waiting for us to return to the original MC of the fic instead we're still following a side arc for the past few months I'm good not interested in how things are panning out never understood why people write like this I'm here for the MC and their journey not side character #573 or Clone Trooper #91127 or something and their life story
ch 122 Chapter 111
Star Wars: Rise of the forgotten clan
Movies · Vapidbread829
Up for either just want more lol
ch 19 Major Question!!!
The Xenomorph on Pandora
Movies · DeadHydra
The MC is a compelte and utter coward enough said constantly hiding playing at being weak and insignificant the stupidity and incompetence is harsh as is but technology mixing with magic in DV while could be interesting is just sh*tty let's be honest it's the absolute worst possible choice for a powerset you could've made and yet here we are like feels like the MC was supposed to be a Marvel/DC Reject that was hastily changed to a DB fic not to say it's all bad but personally the Negatives of this Dic far outweigh the Positives
Dr Blush (Dragon Ball Fanfic)
Anime & Comics · dancematdan