Whatever helps you sleep at night but it will help me keep reading if you “burden” me with some more emotion/expression I don’t mind a stroke victim as a main character but you should at least tell me. Also this is obviously sort of nitpicking and the rest of the writing is good so far I’m enjoying what you’re doing and will follow your story with interest ;)
ch 25 The Mysterious Hideout (4)
Eastern · Avidfan
Pls let Lu qingyun have a different expression. A “bitter smile” is all he has shown. Maybe he’s a stroke victim or something but pls there are other ways to display emotions. Or just don’t tell me what his face looked like at all I’d prefer that over hearing he had a “bitter smile” one more time.
ch 25 The Mysterious Hideout (4)
Eastern · Avidfan
Somehow the writing keeps getting worse
ch 64 Evelyn Nightshade
Fantasy · Ink_Weaver122
See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
ch 0 1 Wielding the Sword
Eastern · Writing For Ten Years
See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza
ch 0 1 Life Simulation and Traits
Eastern · Midnight Beast
You don’t have to state something seven times in a row we get it he made it to the realm and it makes him on par with elders etc i don’t need the reference for his power scaling to be said a dozen times before I understand he might have improved his cultivation
ch 0 7 In the Blink of an Eye, I've Become a Grandmaster!
Eastern · Akina Little Moon
10 gold per meal on average. A chef makes 100 gold a month. His meals cost him ~300 gold a month. What. What is this nonsense. And if it’s the average cost of a NOBLES meal then why would he care. So you are telling me the average MEAL for a commoner is 10 gold. What. What is this nonsense. In a KINGDOM with a population of only twenty thousand. What. What is this nonsense. This is such an easy fix. Up the population to like 2million and make the meal for a commoner 10 copper or whatever. Seriously you can’t have this infrastructure politically and physically with 20k people that just nonsense.
ch 14 Temporary Solution
Fantasy · Disgrace
See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola
ch 0 1 The Twelve Tyrants
Eastern · August Eagle
Written by a fourteen year old with English as a second or third language. I’m just guessing here but if I had to put my money on something it would be that.
Flashy Adventurer System : Show Off to Get Stronger!
Fantasy · Meowder