TatuGDM

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TatuGDM
TatuGDM
1 years ago
Commented

This is worth way more than that. It should be worth hundreds of millions or a few billions. It is way better than that 1 billion canon. Also, after the attack, he should have asked extra money for anything that Pierce was not aware about the price.

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Replied to Kurogano

In this case, as a suggestion, I would recommend to make the girls busy helping the children or something like that... their scape didn't feel natural with all the people available that could kill then with one hit. Looking at the girls development/character the girls would have stopped then if not because of the plot.

This was the first time in a long while since an enemy had escaped him and he was very upset about it "Damn... I should have extended the ward wider.. I just didn't expect an idiot to get in my way so suddenly".

Harry's New Game Plus

Harry's New Game Plus

Book&Literature · Kurogano

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Commented

Ok... why the girls let then run away? They are intelligent and I don't see any reason why they would not help. They can read the situation.

This was the first time in a long while since an enemy had escaped him and he was very upset about it "Damn... I should have extended the ward wider.. I just didn't expect an idiot to get in my way so suddenly".

Harry's New Game Plus

Harry's New Game Plus

Book&Literature · Kurogano

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Commented

Really... agree do not disclose future information??? seems like only valid for the traitor... this is getting ridiculous!!!

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TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Commented

Yeah... and they have disclosure information regarding Snap... why not Peter???

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TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Commented

Seems like this fanfiction will just follow the original plot. Let's see if the Uzumaki clan will survive to confirm this.

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Replied to chefs4

Thank you!

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Replied to chefs4

The problem is that there is nothing being used for dialogue although you are using this new marks for thoughts. As a reader, it is confusing and hard to identify dialogue. I also never read a book or novel with your marks instead of quotes, so I am not sure why quotes would cause confusion for the readers. But that is ok, I don't mind and you can us any system you like. What I mind is a lack of marks for dialogues. It really makes the reading hard.

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Commented

Please help to use " for dialogue and ' for thoughts.

TatuGDM
TatuGDM
2 years ago
Replied to Gargamel72

Probably because the author needs the threat alive for his plot. I honestly don't agree with this approach, the author should not have added A if this is the end result. Also they could return to the village while she killed him. Unless the author justify this in the next chapter, that makes no sense.

Mito took one last look at A and spoke while the red chakra receded off her body "It seems you're lucky today brat, but next time you harm my Granddaughter, I'll kill you myself."

Naruto: The Strongest Senju

Naruto: The Strongest Senju

Anime & Comics · Kingkillerdj2023