Webnovel Author: Chaos_Prime - Novel&Fanfic Collection

A heartwarming Alpha x Alpha romance story set in a high fantasy world. The writing is good, little to no grammatical errors, and an evenly paced plot. A light hearted novel I would recommend to anyone.

I’ve seen this novel’s inception and I’ve anticipated it for more than that. I’m glad it’s finally getting the recognition it deserves. The mystery it has and the world building is fantastic. The execution is one of the most beautiful I have seen. I recommend giving a try till chapter 10 before deciding to drop.

It’s a captivating novel. If you have read the author’s two other works, you will know what to expect in regards to the author’s style. It’s concise and interesting. Nick is a likable MC in my opinion and the way he develops in his post-apocalyptic world will surely be awesome. The power system is gonna be amazing. If you want proof, check the other two novels.

Repect others if you want to be respected. Don’t act like you know anything. You look like a pirate anyway.

In these few years I have known him, lightning was great in his life. He always wrote interesting things and from what I have seen of the first two chapters, this one will be even better.

Too many descriptions. Too many. Stuff I really did not need to know or can tell just from reading are pointed out. The grammar is good, but there are commas and quotation problems. Though, the characters feel natural so at least we can get a grasp on them. It’s not bad but not the best either.

Dialogue is great. Other parts are debatable, but not that bad. It can do a lot better though.

The synopsis is confusing. It promises first POV but we only see third POV. I dub this novel as very confusing. Too many spelling mistakes and most things are confusing. For example: (Regardless, this ”figured” moved forward…) Or: (hight not much higher than her own…) I keep getting lost and rereading to try and find where I am. Ava does not have a bright mind is what I can say if I want to be family friendly. The narrator sounds like someone with a mental illness and keeps adding to the confusion. The only thing one can say is good here is the world building. It looks and reads good. Sadly, it alone cannot salvage this mess of confusion. I may be called Chaos, but even I get confused.

Flowery words… I will start from this. The very beginning is filled with flowery descriptions, which although might not be wrong, it is still like anything else, when overused, it is destructive. The sentences… how should I say, MTL is better? Many of them outright awkward, don’t make sense, or just horrible. An example of this would be: “This easy! The guards weren’t knights!” People don’t talk like that. No one talks like that. Also, some things seem weird. The bandits in the first chapter appear and sound righteous, which although not bad, it is still weird, since you know they are bandits… but this: “She and her upstart knight group have dared to step into OUR land! Stop OUR trade! Steal OUR women! Kill OUR brothers! We won’t let that wench and her knights be!” When have bandits ever looked or spoke like this? They feel more like knights defending their country. Other than that, there is this: “Shh!” The man shushed, quiet, soft. Um, just no. Also, too many exclamation marks. Way way too many. The story is also all over the place. The POV changes too fast and unexpectedly. Some characters appear out of nowhere. In chapter 2, a man literally appeared out of nowhere. Even if one wants to use magic to explain, it still will not make sense because no indication or explanation of his appearance was mentioned.

First one was deleted because I did not read past first chapter. First of all: the synopsis is good. It is interesting and captivating. Some highlights are: 1) earth -> Earth 2) it reads like a mouthful and breaking some of it into smaller chunks could help. The tags are ok, but they feel like an indication of a comedy and this also appears in the synopsis. However, the first chapter does not convey this. The first chapter is good, some spelling errors are there, like Ashuras instead of Asuras. there is also a confusing part. At the start of describing the MC, it says that he is red from all the battles so, it is most likely due to blood. Then, though, it says that his skin is red and white, so it feels confusing. Probably specificng one or elaborating more or even removing one of them can help. The start of the motivational speech was good, yet it quickly deteriorated to a full-on info dump. This put a dampener on things. The MC seemed interesting, however, he fails as a commander and a leader. In the first chapter, he spilled too much unnecessary info and even said that they will lose. That’s not what a good commander will do. The second chapter onwards needs a lot of work. the chapters feel disastrous. The tense change is annoying. Tbh, I had some bias because I like gory-seeming starts, but this is more objective now.

The synopsis gives expectations that one would expect to be interesting that the first chapter fails to deliver. There is no emotional buildup and it falls flat. Not interesting. It also seems like the story was all over the place. The story could have been shorted and compacted into smaller chapters with higher quality and some of them felt unnecessarily long. However, Oakflame, the author has improved when compared to his previous works. It’s not a bad novel, but it’s not that good either.

Four things: 1) This novel will bind you like a snake and won’t let you go. 2) Read this novel without question or miss out on the chance of a lifetime. 3) if you’re not hooked, I think your brain isn’t working. Have you considered visiting a psychologist? 4) I know you will ask this, so here is a possible answer: This most likely won’t be a harem, so stop annoying the author with that question. (Tags exist for a reason, after all). Time for the cringe part.… I have ascended through the 200 Heavens through devouring this novel and became the first Immortal titled: Chaos. (I said so, so it’s totally canon). Watch as the next generation overtake me! Well, they already did since this novel is about the last one.

Four things: 1) This novel will bind you like a snake and won’t let you go. 2) The funny moments in it are to die for. 3) if you’re not hooked, I think your brain isn’t working. Have you considered visiting a psychologist? 4) I know you will ask this, so here is a definite answer: This is a ROMANCE so don't annoy the author with that question. (Tags exist for a reason, after all). Anyway, this is perfect and if you don't like my Twinny's work, there must be something wrong, so suffer my wrath.