OrickOvee

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OrickOvee
OrickOvee
1 months ago
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Every Chapter has too much Description 😕

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
1 months ago
Commented

he is a coward

POINT 1: Aemon is INDEPENDENT. He is no one's puppet. He's not Daemon's, Viserys's, Rhaenyra's, his mother's, Jeyne Arryn's, or even mine. He is independent and will always act in his own best interest.

Aemon Targaryen

Aemon Targaryen

TV · Ghostrider0002

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
1 months ago
Commented

coward MC

"You are greatly exaggerating the situation. Remember that we are here for ten, maybe twenty days and then back home. It is extremely important to show the rest of the nobility of the Vale and even the kingdom that House Royce is doing well and that you are strong; it will keep the vultures seeking blood at bay," she said, this time seriously.

Aemon Targaryen

Aemon Targaryen

TV · Ghostrider0002

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
4 months ago
Commented

why not MC aged ..... he always 17 years old ... time pass but he still 16/17 ...

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
5 months ago
Commented

After so many days .... u write this chapter ...!!!

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
5 months ago
Commented

too much stretching on same kind of topics.... last 4/5 chapter are kind of same .... Sorry but I have to say because I like the concept of your fanfic....

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
OrickOvee
OrickOvee
11 months ago
Commented

I am starting to hate the MC ...... I don't know why

OrickOvee
OrickOvee
11 months ago
Commented

Use single name for every single character ... it is confusing to identify the character.

"Yes, sweetie!" Sarah answered absentmindedly, her mind racing as she sat down and forced a smile at the young man, "Of course! How are you and your friends holding up?" 

Surviving the Apocalypse With My Three SSS Rank Wives

Surviving the Apocalypse With My Three SSS Rank Wives

Fantasy · One_Winged_Angel