Great re-write, in my opinion. It improved upon, and the dialogue is significantly more fluid. Also wanted to say for anyone wondering, this is a cross post from QQ. So if you can't wait, go to QQ for the up to date chapters.
Even if the Jedi forms don't translate to sword to sword combat, do you really think that they can't beat some willy-nilly men at arms. Think about it Jedi or force trained individuals in SW fight against laser shooting people with a melee weapon, just the experience alone would make any a better fighter.
He was aggressive, and held his sword with uncharacteristic nonchalance. His blows were light and quick, serving simply to probe openings in his opponents, yet when one of them overreached, he swiftly knocked him down with a blistering blow to the nape of his neck.
ASOIAF: King of Winter
Book&Literature · PrinceOfNilfheim
...we get itadori...
She's been marked... did not see that coming
Aiko was lying on the bed, dressed in a stark black gown instead of her preferred black-and-white maid uniform. Her features were unmarked and unhurt, save for the scar she'd received trying to save him—the scar from the day that marked his descent into the world of sorcery. She looked peaceful, as if she were merely sleeping, and Jiki might have wanted to believe that was true if not for the glaring sign of that lie etched on her forehead.
Cursed Eyes (Itachi in JJk)
Anime & Comics · FreddySZN
I only know one person associated with gravity in Jjk.
It was incomplete, like a message that the owner had not managed to finish.
Cursed Eyes (Itachi in JJk)
Anime & Comics · FreddySZN
I can handle any sort of change by fanfic authors, like gender-swapped, modernized fics too, and sometimes the occasional MC but in name only, what grates my nerves are the age ole' bashing fics. I will continue some more but only because there is excellent grammar.
It was 1976, July 3rd 1976 to be exact, I had finished my fifth year and was looking forward to starting sixth year in about two months, my fifth year had been the worst year of my entire life according to old Serena, I had broken off my friendship with Lily, largely because of old Serena in a fit of rage, but I also blamed James Potter and the others heavily, and despite my multiple apologies Lily hadn't forgiven me even when I was crawling with her, Sirius Black had almost murdered me using Remus Lupin as a weapon and to top it off Dumbledore had basically threatened to expel me if I so much as opened my mouth, so yeah, it was a shitty year, and I could agree with old Serena .
Serena Snape: Love of Magic
Anime & Comics · Camellya_Addams
He's a Maestar, and most houses especially great houses know to not hold the Grey rats too close.
Of all the words in the Tully motto, 'family' comes first. Always. And when the choice laid between my son and Maester Kym, a man I had known all my life, the decision was never in doubt. My son's life was paramount, as it should be.
Game of Thrones: The Odd-Fish
TV · Barbare
Jiki getting all the huzzzz.... I approb
Lol Falmuth is going through a recession.
One silver coin is equal to $10 U.S. Dollars, so 30 bucks total to enter The Dungeon.
I'm a Daemon, so what? (Tensura/Multicross)
Anime & Comics · theogbasilisk