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Feels like the mc needs to point out that it’s not dark, he’s feeling the negative emotions of both the tailed beast and the negative emotions it evokes in him

I’m not to fussed with the name but you could stop calling it a curse, just call it Yang Mark, maybe Yang Sealing Mark, curse comes across to much like Orochimarus stuff

He’s Meng Bei right? So just get a soul ring?

I’m not the only one who remembers him having a capsule in his mouth and breaking it when he kissed her so that she consumed the contents and then her reacting to whatever he put in her mouth? Right? She should be very aware, especially if she got herself tested afterwards

The power of devil fruits is always messed up, Buddha is basically a god yet all of its abilities were limited to, grow big and gold then hit people with shockwaves, yes Sengoku was strong but Buddha was credited to have a wide range of mystical abilities and they weren’t shown, Yamata no Orochi is also a perfect example, this devil fruit out of Japanese mythology took Susanoo god of storms and brother to Amaterasu to kill, it gets hinted at in One Piece that there might be 3 other god level devil fruits besides Luffys Nika Sun God, but realistically lots of devil fruits should be god level fruits but there powers make them seem trash, I know it’s mostly on the users to make them powerful but some things should still be made basic but get ignored

It was pointed out in another fanfic but Ace calls Garp jiji which means gramps or grandpa which makes Garp a generation older than Roger and Whitebeard making them his Sons, talk about not letting others get in the last line

I have the image of Luffy riding chopper while he’s in his small form

I’ll have to disagree with logia devil fruits being comparable to the Rinnegan and Yin-Yang Release, not that devil fruits are worse just that the Rinnegan created a moon and Yin-Yang release created life yes there are similar abilities such as the soul soul fruit homies but that fruit is a paramecia, devil fruits are definitely better than a lot of Kekkei Genkai though, ninja are very much glass cannons their attack output is high but they’re hardly any S-rank defensive jutsu besides Susanoo and only a few A-rank

I’ll forgive the use of Danku even though it’s a No.81 bakudo but a rank 99 Bakudo is over the top, rank 90+ were meant to be comparable to a Bankai and kido vary in strength depending on who uses them, the captain commander was called the strongest shinigami for a reason if the mc has even a hundredth of his reiatsu this is completely overkill

As a reader of many Chinese fanfics I highly recommend changing the name of the mc, its never a good name and that always downgrades the story as a whole, that doesn’t mean you need to make the name something “special” or “cool” but it can turn the fanfic from “readable but annoying” to “this is really good hopefully there’s no cliche moments” hopefully this advice helps