AsurElthrai

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AsurElthrai
2 years ago
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The Phoenix should have just answered: "42"

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AsurElthrai
2 years ago
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thanks for the chapter, i think option 1 Is more interesting, becouse It can create a new rivalry, the new apprentice group that tries, and fails miserably, ti surpass the first, true apprentice, and Naruto that guide them together the protagonist, while carring team 7

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AsurElthrai
2 years ago
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As a suggestion you could do both, he can skip forward a few years at a time so he can grow, but the ancient one limit him or the time travel does, he can grow but slowly untill he reach his own time. This way he can accumulate knowledge but not power, and when he is back in his own time he could start to grow emotionaly, because he repressed his fealing tring to understand his own immortality. I trew some suggestion hoping to inspire the autor. I realy like this story so thank you very much for letting us all read it

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
Commented

I think both or neither is more interesting Thank you for the chapter!

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
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Hi, thanks for the story, i think this is a perfect opportunity to have Hermione in the mix, with for guardian beasts each wife rappresenting one I hope Cross could do somethink he wouldn't have done if his other wifes were present, so explore an extremely dangerous region connected to the void and maybe shed a bit of light on his origin? In any case i like your story, i hope this give you some ideas

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
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And you cold say samthing about "he has too much information in his head, so he go berserk when tring to use it without preparation (es in combat) and tap in his understanding sub-consciusly" to explain hi berserk state

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
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Hi hoping you will resume writing this story, i realy like it, i suggest you the power over lenguage, first is understanding spoken and written words, nothing fancy, than you have understanding of intention trough non-verbal lenguage, then you could expand at tecnokinesis and telepaty as form of comunication to enchanting as word magic and conclude with the lenguage of the universe to use magic Hoping to give you ideas Thank you again

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
Commented

thanks for the chapter for Harry parents you could manipulate peaple to belive the potters died and make It so seryus does not go to azkaban he adopt Harry instead of the dursley in the eye of the public while peaple belive the potters are in coma like the longbottoms dorea could be the godmother of Harry ti justify the adoption Just trowing some ideas

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
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Hi, thanks for the chapter I think you should go with option 2 with a bit of romance between Peggy and Bucky They with stark create shield Peggy and bucky keep each other company while helping coping with Steve "Death" Shield take in Zola Zola kidnap Bucky Time line restored Peggy and bucky could have a doughter or a son to help bucky recover his mind later on Hoping to give you some idea

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AsurElthrai
3 years ago
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thanks for the chapter, i realy likes the story for them forgetting i thing it Is possibile if they do not enter in contact with wizards again, so no maggleborne relative for them or somethingh he can make It so that of Simone remember magic the also Remember dumbledor removing the memory for the protection of the lover ones or somethingh similar i say dumbledor becouse "why not troll him?"