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ah darn 馃様

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The Lustful Young Master is Sinister!

The Lustful Young Master is Sinister!

Eastern 路 Cultured_Daoist69

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not bad, as far as info dumps go, this isn't too overwhelming

Anyway, that about sums up the summarized history and basic current structure of the island continent I'm on. I'll gradually get into the details later, this has become quite the info dump already, so I'll leave it at that for now.

The Reincarnated Mercenary's Only Skill is Item Box

The Reincarnated Mercenary's Only Skill is Item Box

Fantasy 路 Aimdaqs

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"Raise your arms and drop onto your knees. Don't struggle or try to resist and if you think of running, I am emptying this shit into your ass."

Protagonist?Antagonist? I Reject Both

Protagonist?Antagonist? I Reject Both

Fantasy 路 Lonelythree

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going to the 2nd arc, which unfortunately has skipped major character building, progressions & interactions with named characters, so much so that it felt like instead of a plot hole, we have arc holes, as it felt like there should've been 1~2 arc before he went to the academy, alot of the crucial details that explains his growth and main goal has been completely skipped, so much so that why even bother adding all the parts on his journey, when he could've just be falsely accused while he is studying in the academy, but is still manage to stay there due to it being rumors and lacking evidence? wouldn't that make more sense rather than having to skip arcs just to lead to this academy arc Also, the characters the protagonist has interacted with during his adventures from the 1st arc has been discarded into obscurity, specifically the mentor, the heroine and villainess, It is a waste to not see them at all in the 2nd arc since they have the potential to be with him in the academy as his allies. Also, why isn't he disguised when he enters the academy? couldn't he have received help from a heroine to influence the academy to give him a backdoor entrance as someone else or something? why go through all this annoying drama where everyone wants to pick a fight with him :/, pretty dumb move if i say so myself if you gonna show your face in public after being accused in public for raping the princess and not get worried abt the risk of being assassinated by a 3rd party or something.And lastly another major complaint I have, is the tell but not show, because of the many timeskips, alot of the powers he earned are just randomly popped up out of nowhere, the girls he rizzed are said to be obsessed with him, but where, i cant see it, he only mentioned it in a paragraph, I guess I'll just have to his word for it 馃憤tl:dr: too much skip, story suffers from tell but not show, and unnecessary drama

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didn't he train for like a few months be4 this?

He was utterly unfamiliar with the notion of mana and aura, and as a result, he was completely ignoring it in his fight, making everything more difficult than it needed to be.

Saga of Atlantis

Saga of Atlantis

Fantasy 路 Noob6_writer9

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See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola

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ayo o.0 馃拃馃槇

"Hmm? It's short and thick yet quite sticky...What is this master?" Ning couldn't help but ask involuntarily.

Surprisingly Enough(NOT),Common Sense Is Overpowered in a Clich茅 World

Surprisingly Enough(NOT),Common Sense Is Overpowered in a Clich茅 World

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