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It starts off too slow, couldn’t get past 4 chapters. The author’s writing style feels quite passive. More telling than showing. And there is not much going on to draw me I the story. I feel as if I’m reading chapter after chapter of preamble. Dropped.

Review As good as this novel is, it has a few fatal flaws, which will more than likely have me stop reading. The good: An interesting concept, elements of mystery, a decent amount of action, and some moments that make you want the MC to do some face-slapping. And if it weren’t for all the filler (described in #1 below) I’d likely keep reading. The bad: 1. If I can skip 5-10 chapters straight and not feel as if I missed anything, you wrote too many unnecessary events. And I have done this at least twice and skimmed so many chapters, which is terrible where you’re paying for chapters. 2. Almost 300 chapters and main plot is not progressing. The MC has barely taught anyone. So, the title and synopsis is misleading. Sure, there are elements of teaching, but it’s clearly not the focus. The author does something a lot of authors get wrong: focuses on the training. Training IRL is tedious… so, why would I want to read about someone training? 3. The MC seems too skilled in almost everything. And the nature of his powers vs the ones others have make it seem he’s just overpowered within his realm. We aren’t introduced to enough diversity of other powers to make the MC appear not overpowered but skilled in a select few things. So to be specific, it’s not about strength alone, but abundance of skills that can be the issue. 4. The author clearly hates short people. All the main characters are extraordinarily tall, and the short characters that are barely mentioned are described as gremlins and evil. Where is the character diversity? I can understand that the MC is very tall and if this is a harem, then maybe the women you want in it should be very tall, but unless everyone is as tall, this doesn’t seem realistic in terms of the people you casually meet. 5. For a harem, it’s a good novel. And the author does a better job than most harems in a particular regard, but still falls short. Where are the other SKILLED and decent male characters? There are other male characters that may be decent people (which is where this novel does better than others), but the male characters are often too average or only have their parents backing for them to be considered the cream of the crop. It’s either that, or the MC is so overpowered that we can’t tell if someone is actually decently skilled. Telling us they are good is not enough when we need to see it. What Id like to see: 1. While it may be too late for me, for others, I think you should tighten up the writing and excel the plot. 2. Diversify the skills so the MC doesn’t look so overpowered. 3. Add some regular short characters or average height characters that are normal, even if they aren’t a focus. There could be short characters but the author only mentions it for “gremlins”or for women that may be considered for the “harem”.