MC and the other MC that you wrote have the same personality that it gets boring reading the same obsessed with his love and would die if something goes wrong to his partner and the drama everytime. it's a the same with your last blood elf MC, he start with easygoing character that do everything he wants . and then when he got a partner he became paranoid and obsesse. ugghhhhh.
too much inner monologue
and please .the strength of MC is equal to mortal shredding realm with a hundred ancient black dragon and you let him stay in novice village for like 12-15chaps hey nice salted fish mentality
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I know you want to explain thing too much but at least separate it in aux chap..
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why is he wasting time too much staying in 1 place, he knows the story right? then why not make use of it? I mean get resources instead of wasting time? I don't know the author's intent on MC not doing anything at all?? and too much explanation of what's happening around him.. just one chap and all I know is he made a breakthrough and stay at night at duans place , nothing more.
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How about make a game about kingdom building, then let them fight each other's kingdom and some monster stampede like the novel The World Online.
ummm Author . Can you you please write more of story, not the love couple of luna and cross too much, but the plot you plan, because after converting Luna into elf most of your latest chapters revolves around the love story of two of them.
You basically use status page 3 times per chapter . I don't know if you check it or not but please reduce making it appear in every chapter just to fullfil the words count
well it's good and all for past chaps. now we need to pay to read full chaps. I'm out
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