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2023-11-30 入りました Global
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DaoistLZJzvG
7 months ago
Posted

The problem with this novel is the lack of tension. A lot of things happen in a short amount of time. The main character gets really strong for someone who just started his journey compared to Fang Yuan in the early arcs of the original novel. While Fang Yuan used any Gu he could get, this guy creates his own without experience. This novel has some good ideas but it needs a rewrite.

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DaoistLZJzvG
7 months ago
Commented

also for a newbie to the gu world this guy creates many gu.

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DaoistLZJzvG
7 months ago
Commented

fang yuan didn't kill his clan to be alone. he got a chance to upgrade his talent using the blood of his clansman.

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DaoistLZJzvG
7 months ago
Commented

Someone who just started has created many gu. That's overpowered. If this continues, there will not be any challenge for the story to stay engaging.

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DaoistLZJzvG
11 months ago
Commented

she's a leader and you made her sound like a dumb child

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DaoistLZJzvG
11 months ago
Posted

for someone who reincarnated with his memory as an adult this guy is a coward ,lazy and stupid. refuse to train because he hates pain. refuse to make connections with his classmates because one guy bully's him. starts selling drugs in a world with ninjas who have super smelling, magical eyes and communicate with super animals. if all of this didn't stop you from reading this shit then nothing will.