Spectral Showdown

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Kazuya_mikoto

Dear author, (forgive me if my message will be long) I'm a reader and I just joined webnovel group to try and look for books (and honestly there are ALOT OF GOOD BOOKS and I'm putting them on my list to read but this one caught my attention because bruh the sypnosis 🤣) when I stumbled upon your post I just want to let you know that your story is intriguing, I was curious because of the sypnosis and I was looking for unique stories online and this caught my attention along with the others. However, I just want slight changes (just my opinion huhu) I want you to improve your dialogues, please don't add more details and follow the saying: "Show, don't tell", your story ends up in cliffhangers which is good because it hooks readers and please refrain from editing your book too much because it would lead to your past viewers from being confused. (but I'm glad you left a message on the sypnosis of your story, so that they won't get lost) so I hope, everyone would come back and read this again so they can catch up with the plot. I also love that you used real places and you raised awareness because people this days, when reading are sensitive to topics such as the war in Israel and for real, you shouldn't really involve you characters in the war or start any conflict because that would raise a red flag to 'those' people, haha so you really need to adjust. and lastly, the words, refrain from repeating it again and again, your story is good and it's intriguing. I like how scenes switches and it progressed and hopefully, your past readers will come back so they could catch up again and read your story. Overall your story is good, keep it intriguing, Hope you're going to continue and finish this but this time, no erasures, no simultaneously editing and everything will be fine for you. Hope you reach the top.

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Thangi_Albert

Good book, lots of interesting action and awesome writing quality the author has some good writing technics and abilities, I would like to see this book at the top

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Johannes_Estacion

Well Overall This story is not boring at all and I was already interested in chapter 1. The writing and the background are good.

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Giovanni_Chimal

The story is quite interesting and intriguing, it makes you want to keep reading to see what will happen. I personally loved it, keep it up.🙂☺

LV 4

IzannahFrame

Whoa... That was a massive intro. It's descriptive, and I really like how you show what's happening. Great job, author. Very interesting.

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Kichiro_Belo

This work could've been one of the best novel in webnovel. The story is really good all the way through. Keep it up bro..

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KenitsuHiroshima

This book is awesome! I really loved it. The story was great, the characters were cool. I'd recommend it to everyone!

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SHADEWHISPER

Definitely an intriguing story, the plot is interesting and the way it’s described is pretty simple and easy to understand and doesn’t rushed up. I highly recommend it.

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SleepyyCraft

first of all this is amazing, I like the plot and how it is moving so smoothly, those small details really keep the story alive and yes writing style is top notch you can easily connect with characters, how they are feeling at that moment fear, anxious, it's beautifully captured by the author, i loved it please update more xD it's 10/10 all together.

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Noveleye

Suberb fantasy novel. I Love the narrative. It's easy to follow and the characters are almost real ( even though it's fantasy 😅 hehe) nice book. Just added to my collection by the way.

LV 3

CARLO_VIVANTI

I like the beginning and even if the publisher asks the author to change but I like it except that the novel has short chapters

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Aiji_Kanroji

I'll give this story a 10, though I know it's descriptive writing, I find this unique and I could feel the emotions of the characters, but I felt like it was a little bit bland? I'm a little confused as well, but overall you're fine.

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Candice_Morreale

Strong start and full of action and mystery.