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Primordial Dimensions
4.66 (85 レビュー結果)
Bronze Prize for WSA 2021 Contest
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"Finally,“ he thought, stepping through the spatial membrane, into the vast and dangerous `Primordial Dimension` where life and death are infinitely close to each other.
Dying unexpectedly, Shane found himself in the body of a newborn baby, within a strange, foreign world.
The foreign world, inhabited all kinds of terrifying beasts which escaped from the Primordial Dimensions in order to create havoc on it.
Even though humanity was on the brink of extinction, the Primordial Dimensions provided an unimaginable opportunity to reach higher realms, while imminently threatening them with the possibility to be conquered by foreign races.
But who would have thought that the destructive and cruel Primordial Dimension where monstrous existences emerged from, would one day become humanity´s ray of hope?
Becoming stronger and wielding elements by absorbing mana was not a dream anymore, only to notice, that everything was not as simple, as they initially thought...
Follow Shane Suro on his journey through the vast Primordial Dimensions where he learns about freedom, friendship, cruelty, loyalty, and betrayal.
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Mc's name is the same as one character in my other novel, but they're not the same! It has a deeper meaning but other than that these two characters have nothing really in common!
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[This novel has the "Fantasy" tag for a reason and does not necessarily follow a common logic]
[Information/World-build/Character-growth and interaction with new characters are important to build a proper novel and take their time. Every chapter is important, even if it's difficult to spot it sometimes!]
--Mc's earth is fictional and not necessarily our earth!--
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A satisfactory combination of system and normal cultivation setting A plus point for adding more races than the tipycal elf,dwarf,... +:mc isn't some stupid guy unaware of everything +:He isn't cold-blooded which is rare in recent novels +: Hunting beasts scenes appears real because we don't see mc hunting them with just a single slash of his sword -: the only thing that worries me a bit is that I don't see any description on what is beyond advanced dimension
The author has a penchant for writing YA heroes in a dystopian world and this book based on the initial few chaps seems to be as brilliant as his debut novel. Some people may not like info-dumps but I like to get a good look at the world and the background where the story is set in to get a feel of the book. The initial chapters help set the story in action. Shane’s transition from a conflicted youngster to the main character with a mission makes it a worthwhile read. I generally do not read system novels but I would gladly make an exception for this one.
The story is good it's just that it's going downhill boring. There's so many technical explanation than the story progression. If you disect the chapter 86% of that is explanation then the remaining is the story development. Sometimes I think this is a technical book instead of a novel.I got so bored from reading this that I wrote this review of a pent up frustration to relieved me from ruining my day.
I really like the world build and the unique system every human has. Please release more chapters...:I support you with all my power stones!!
Heavily overrated for how bad the grammar is, sure superb world building and character development, but if you have to read thrice the same phrase to understand what the author wants to say I can't give it a higher raiting. What's so hard to get an editor? You can find a half decent one for little to no money. I am sure the money made on the novel can cover for an editor. Well my opinion.
So far so good, I really like the story development. The taming aspect is cool, and ranks are being pumped through like eating candy. That may change in the future, but so far so good.
Just started reading but my first impression of it was why add the whole transmigration plot? Couldnt he just have the blessing? And in doing so the whole story and behavior would make much more sense, I am not a fan of having an adult transmigrated mc behave like teenager. And the whole progression of the story is kind of slow and dull, its arduous to read, I kind of get trying to make it more realistic with the whole normal cultivation but that's kinda duft since this is fantasy and cultivation in itself is fantasy so why try to make it realistic, give me so fast boosts man, give me some thrill.
I dont normally read cultivation novels, I prefer manga, but I am liking this story already. I will vote it with all my ps. Good Job author!!
[Author note: With this chapter, the first volume of Shane's adventure comes to an end. Thank you for accompanying me in Shane's adventures and I hope you all enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it. As I am building a multiverse, it is very important for the timelines to be aligned, which means that I have to divide Shane's journey into two parts! I don't want to spoiler you guys too much, after all! I hope this won't come across as an absolute shocker to all of you. My writing journey has just begun and I have a new novel in store for you. It will be released in order to create a suitable timeline and trust me, it is even better ;) This new novel will be released on the 1st January 2022, while the sequel detailing Shane's escapades will follow once the time is ripe! Happy reading!!] I understand what the Author is trying to do here and I hope it works out for him and his LNs. However, for me this means that I have to wait over a year or two to finally get to read anything more about this LN while he writes other ones. Right now as a reader all I care about is this one and moving forward with the story. By the time he gets back to this LN I will have stopped even caring about it or the MC.
Honestly although quite wordy at times, the story is decently written. The mc is what I have a hard time believing. Now if it wasn't a transmigration story and the kid grew up in a home where he was pandered to and he had gained a very disdaining attitude towards pretty much everyone, then I can definitely see him being the character that he is now. It feels as if everyone but him is an idiot or a sycophant in his viewpoint. This could be a legitimate character that grows by discovering that he is not the center of the universe and that people generally don't like teenagers with explosive mood swings no matter how intelligent or handsome they may be. He could learn tact and humility for starters.
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honestly the story is quite good, but there are too much classification. It is really frustrating to have to look at the glossary every time to understand the level of classification. I think you should make an identical classification (grade / quality) for the Items/ Manuals....
It just end like that or not but i hope it not end yet and will continue . Well the story is quite nice and the storyline is quite interesting.
The concept is intriguing but that is where it ends. After that, wether it is story progression, being coherent or the Main character, everything is disappointing. Considering the militarised nature of the world, the lack of respect MC shows towards its military is very surprising. The only apt character trait that author has been able to bring forth is how a typical wealthy son would act. He has his narrow point of view which is based on the elite pov as is usually is.
Fantastic LN. Everyone should read this! Keep up the great work Author! Fantastic LN. Everyone should read this! Keep up the great work Author!
pretty good, i hope you don't drop this one has become one of my favourite novels ............................................................ sorry for my bad english
nice story, good world description, can't wait for more chapter !!! try it !!!
Overall background of the story and its progression is good... Too bad its a one man show... The MC is just being developed and his lack of interaction with SC is killing the novel...
Grain has always been great in writing, world building, and update stability! The world building makes me wonder if I can also enter the primordial dimension, xD Great read!
The story itself is quite nice, the information "dump" is quite easily consumable and doesnt overwhelm as its written well, in this novel in comparison to god eyes we have more detail for the cultivation, with how the first three stages are preparatory for actual tranformations or evolutions to come, how in these three supposed perfect foundations for body and energy can be made, and further levels dont have these foundations to segregate but will have "actual cultivation" so more on their own comprehensions and raw power, while building on their formidable base which they can create before breaking through to the 4th level, the academy is also finally including more characters which is a fresh feeling and much needed Now for other things Seeing as the other novel is heavily focused on beasts, i honestly hope we dont actually see an actual beast army here like we will potentially see in the other one The novel is again quite smooth and in 161 chapters has set quite a nice base, from the slow start to the quick catchup to now competing with the same age, which has made the novel quite enjoyable to read, though honestly freaky situations only happening alround the mc in 200 years of history has to stop at some point now that its been done 2-3 times Lastly and my only problem with this novel honestly except the unending monologues and constant calculative and nuetral thought process of the mc which doesnt match his personality anyway, adding some actual additional characters his age who have conversations is much needed, the monologues at 161 chapters are finally starting to live out their welcome with the base for the story set The mc, has been depicted in quite a paradoxical way, ill ignore the reincarnated stuff as thats honestly not really given much to his personality except a sense of adventure which he wouldve gotten himself anyway in time , we have in these chapters seen so many defining features which are parts of a much more high profile personality, be it his unbending will, ambition for freedom and power, cunning, volatile temper, greed, used to killing thus calmer and having more time for calculations, having lived with the stronngest humans who have been told to themselves have high profile personalities and not at all passive or subdued, even implying the mc has taken much of his own personality from looking at his father and aunts and uncles, these characterics he suddenly shows in situations are supposed to be his personality not just parts of it, him having resentment towards being kept in the mansion and not let out for anything he likes to do has been implied but its just not strong enough to the extent where he doesnt seem to actually resent anyone but take everything as love, which is illogical for a teenager (even if reincarnated teenager) he is immature and should resent but doesnt, hes said to be lazy and a tantrum thrower, but these are barely shown,hes even said to be overbearing when fighting or in an agressive mood due to the things hes had to go theough in his childhood Honestly its quite weird with so many traits that the mc has been shown to have a neutral and passive personality and thought process(monologues) it makes no sense, nobody can have a neutral personality and have these volatile and high profile /active traits rather hes shown to be abnormally passive,neutral,polite and nice as if something is suppressing his soul and actual personality and it only breaks out when hes put in a situation, plus being trapped in one place for all his life should make him want to know lots of people, make lots of noise, couse a havoc, let the seven sins of his personality take over, make mistakes, whereas what we see is a guy who doesn't want any attention and is somehow a lone wolf, is lonely but wants to keep to himself, doesnt talk to people much, ofcourse not many his equals have been shown for him to equally talk to but thats not something that can be helped, he has no teenage pangs or much interest in the opposite gender or anything even though hes a 2 time teenager, who should be facing hormonal mood swings This personality of the mc with a rational, nuetral, passive, pragmatic core is paradoxical to his traits and is illogical, the god eyes mc having almost the same personality is another minus, but the god eyes mcs personality is justified unlike this one Unless the mc is fixed to what has actually been written about him rather than this, this story being very well written and a brilliant read takes a back seat as the mcs perspective makes no sense and almost makes it seem like the mcs soul is suppresed or that were somehow reading about the god eyes mc rather than this ones Honestly, i like the book and hope that the mc is atleast tweaked/fixed to some degree as i really hope to read till the end!
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